critique wanted Wingdaloos Adventures

[Redhatbrony 59]

Welcome Bronys,

 

this is my translated fanfiction.

I've just thinging of a background story for my favourite Cutie Mark Crusader.

I hope you enjoy my work and follow me on Fimfiction.

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/310258/wingdaloos-adventures

Edited January 23, 2016 by Redhatbrony

[Redhatbrony 59]

If you liked my story,

please post a commentary.

And if you didn't like it,

comment too.

Edited January 23, 2016 by Redhatbrony

[Redhatbrony 59]

I have translated my Fanfiction much further.

So if you like give me some advise.