writing A random story I thought of...

[ThatOnePwny 59]

Ok, so this isn't actually the writing. That's below. THIS is a sort of intro, just to tell you that I'm writing this right now, right here. I'm pulling this out of my head RIGHT NOW. I'm bored and I just wanna write, but I also want critique. It's gonna be science fiction, I guess. Also, not everything is final. Like the title. For now, it's called "Lunacy". So yeah. With that, here we go:

 

The thunder boomed loudly overhead, while the lightning lit up the night sky, revealing a hilltop with many buildings organized in a large circle. There were four supermassive things that looked to be satellite dishes pointed at the sky in the center of the circle. It was quiet, other than the loud storm brewing overhead. The buildings on the hilltop were the Omega Corporation HQ, one of America's largest and most diabolical corporations to ever exist. The government didn't allow them to practice any science at all. But what power did they have? Omega Corp had recruited some of the smartest and most evil people on the planet to work with them. They'd achieved so many negative things throughout the years: creating new diseases, new weaponry, new animals. Anything that comes out of that place is bad news. But this project...it was the biggest yet.

 

Nobody in the country knew what they were planning. John knew, of course, because he worked there. It was a massive project, consisting of the greatest evil minds of John's generation. Nothing could possibly go wrong. Of course, that's what they always say at Omega Corp. And usually, they're wrong. But they were absolutley sure of it this time, because if they weren't, the entire Earth was in danger. And that would be terrible, wouldn't it?

 

The thunder boomed once again as the Moon flashed briefly into view. It was such a powerful little thing, thought John. It controlled the tides, lit up the night sky, and generally helped the Earth in many ways. So much power in such a small object (compared to the Earth, of course). And what if one corporation could harness all of that power? he asked himself. They'd have the final say on everything, wouldn't they? John gently laughed to himself, anxious to start work on Project Blackout. He quietly wished the storm would lighten up, but Omega Corp was paranoid that someone unauthorized would get into the HQ, so they kept the storm going. It was entirely artificial; everything from the rain to the lightning was created in order to shield any unwanted people from getting in. It did its job well. No one had broken into Omega Corp HQ since many years ago, and that was when it was a much smaller corporation. Now, it was almost worldwide.

 

---//Okie dokie, I'm done writing for now. Tell me what you think. It's not too good IMO, but I was just writing however.\\---

[One 498]

Nice..nice..( I just read the first short paragraph, scrolled down, looked at your sig and smiled like it always makes me do, then wrote nice twice)

So I hope that review is good enough for you.

[XxBRONY4LIFExX 29]

good job man. I actualy really liked it

[Filly Pinkie Pie 208]

Great!

MORE!!!

[zDashiez 496]

That was actually quite good you should finish it

Edited July 10, 2012 by zRevenantz