Only a Background Pony - Fanfiction

[Clarity 3,094]

Hello everypony, Leaf Shade here! Thanks to all who voted on my poll for my fanfic. However, I don't plan to start without getting a for-sure title first, so I decided to work on a short story.

 

I thought back to how I felt when AJ was called a background pony, so I thought of an idea. Making a story based on that, how Applejack feels when treated that way.

 

I barely did the first 100 words, but you may read it if you wish; I'll need proofreaders to check for conventions, too. You may also give ideas! ^-^

 

http://www.fimfictio...Background-Pony

 

Oops, almost forgot. The password is ********. I won't give it now since it's in rather a mess, but I'll give the pass to somepony who would volunteer to proofread it.

Edited September 13, 2012 by Leaf Shade

[Mushy Giant Friend 206]

This looks awesome! I'd love to proof read for you, if you want me to that is. Looks like it will be an interesting story, to say the least!

[Clarity 3,094]

  On 2012-09-11 at 1:05 PM, 'Hufflepuff' said:

This looks awesome! I'd love to proof read for you, if you want me to that is. Looks like it will be an interesting story, to say the least!

 

I'd love to have you proofread my story! ^-^ I appreciate honest critiques!

I don't plan on making it long, though. I want it to be around maybe 8,000-10,000 (which isn't quite a lot in FiMfiction terms) but I think it would make for a nice, rant-like message thingy to the mean background pony jokers.

[Mushy Giant Friend 206]

  On 2012-09-11 at 1:09 PM, 'Leaf Shade' said:

I'd love to have you proofread my story! ^-^ I appreciate honest critiques!

I don't plan on making it long, though. I want it to be around maybe 8,000-10,000 (which isn't quite a lot in FiMfiction terms) but I think it would make for a nice, rant-like message thingy to the mean background pony jokers.

 

Great! I'll be completely honest with you, but I won't be too harsh. It doesn't matter how long the story is, remember, but how well wrote and good it is.

[Clarity 3,094]

  On 2012-09-11 at 1:12 PM, 'Hufflepuff' said:

Great! I'll be completely honest with you, but I won't be too harsh. It doesn't matter how long the story is, remember, but how well wrote and good it is.

 

So what do you think? Does it need conventions editing or anything? Give me a critique

Do you have any experience in writing fanfics? I don't, and I would love someone to give me advice on writing better.

 

Please, anypony? I updated it a little more...

[ParsoOfEquestria 1,490]

this looks like it could bring a tear to my eye, the image sure as hay did. I wouldn't say I don't like sad stories, I'm just not a big fan of them. last sad story I read, I was thinking about it all week and every time I thought about it made me shed tears. don't take my word for it though, a lot of people might enjoy it. I'm not saying I wont, I wouldn't mind reading it, I just have to brace myself for sadness

[Clarity 3,094]

  On 2012-09-12 at 12:16 PM, 'ParsoOfEquestria' said:

this looks like it could bring a tear to my eye, the image sure as hay did. I wouldn't say I don't like sad stories, I'm just not a big fan of them. last sad story I read, I was thinking about it all week and every time I thought about it made me shed tears. don't take my word for it though, a lot of people might enjoy it. I'm not saying I wont, I wouldn't mind reading it, I just have to brace myself for sadness

 

I'm sorry to say you'll be disappointed, because I haven't got to any sad part yet. It's more of a dark thing, anyway. No Gore or anything. I guess it's more of a slice of life.

[ParsoOfEquestria 1,490]

  On 2012-09-12 at 12:27 PM, 'Leaf Shade' said:

I'm sorry to say you'll be disappointed, because I haven't got to any sad part yet. It's more of a dark thing, anyway. No Gore or anything. I guess it's more of a slice of life.

 

oh, well, in that case i would have no trouble at all reading it, though piece of advice, don't rush it, its better to take your time and do right rather than rush it and ruin your story

[Clarity 3,094]

  On 2012-09-12 at 12:42 PM, 'ParsoOfEquestria' said:

oh, well, in that case i would have no trouble at all reading it, though piece of advice, don't rush it, its better to take your time and do right rather than rush it and ruin your story

 

I rushed? Can you tell me where, since I'm not sure XD After all, I've only written the first 1000 words or so, and I plan to make it at least 8000 if not more. Plus there are alternate endings that I plan to write.

[ParsoOfEquestria 1,490]

  On 2012-09-12 at 12:44 PM, 'Leaf Shade' said:

I rushed? Can you tell me where, since I'm not sure XD After all, I've only written the first 1000 words or so, and I plan to make it at least 8000 if not more. Plus there are alternate endings that I plan to write.

 

I didn't say you currently rushed it, I said just try not to rush it. who knows, it might come out even better than you first thought