My New OC

[Courageous Thunder Dash 7,825]

Here's a new OC I created. Tell me what you think. Again, I can't freehand very well, so I just had to use the Pony Maker again.

 

 

Night Flare

Age: 17

Gender: Stallion

Species: Alicorn

Cutie Mark: A black flaming bat, which represents his
ability to combine the element of fire with magic. He is also able to transform
into what is known as his “Flame Stage”. In this form, he can wield fire.

Appearance: Night Flare has a light maroon coat in his
normal form, and looks like a regular Alicorn. He also has a black stripe
pattern going down his legs. He also wears a mysterious necklace. His tail is a
bit long for his size. In his “Flame State,” his coat becomes a darker maroon
and the stripes on his legs become red. In addition, his wings change into that
of a bats. The orb on his necklace glows a shade of red.

Personality: Night Flare is a stealthy and ambitious
Alicorn, who loves to sneak around. He sometimes takes it a little too far and
steals from stores at nightfall. With his advanced spells with an edge of dark
magic, he can be a tad brutish when annoyed. He also sometimes misinterprets
sarcastic jokes aimed at him as insults, which causes him to transform into his
“Flame-Stage. He is also very curious, which also leads him into getting into
trouble.

Backstory: Orphaned at a young age, Night Flare
was never taken into an orphanage. Instead, he was left to survive in the
Everfree Forest. Nopony up to this day still doesn’t know why he was left
there. In addition, there hasn’t been any word of his parents. Due to this, he
started practicing magic at a very young age. Outside of training, he would be
constantly exploring the Everfree Forest. One day as he was exploring the
Everfree Forest, he stumbled upon an old shrine. This shrine was known to
radiate mysterious magic. In the center of the Shrine was a tablet that
contained a necklace within it. Nopony knew about the necklace and what power
it held inside. Somehow, it was destined for Night Flare to be the holder of
that necklace. As he drew closer, the necklace began to glow a faint
maroon-red. He then came closer and the necklace glowed even brighter. Finally
he came into grabbing range. He slowly extended his hoof to pick it up. When he
picked it up, the unexpected happened. The necklace bound itself around Night
Flares neck as if it had a life of its own. The glowing stopped. It took
several seconds for him to recover from the incident. Little did he know that this
necklace contributed to his talent, which would soon be revealed. He soon found
his way to Ponyville. However, he wasn’t welcomed well. May ponies were scared
of him because of his appearance. It wasn’t until one day a little unicorn was
being bullied by two older unicorns. This was the day that changed his life. He
had been sad and depressed because everypony was afraid of him. Now, it was
time, to stand up for this little defenseless unicorn. Night Flare felt his
anger increasing inside of him. Somehow, the necklace was feeding off his
emotion of anger and turning that anger into power he could use. He then saw
one of the bullies fire a beam at the defenseless little unicorn. Imidiately,
he felt a surge of power as his anger grew. He finally couldn’t take it anymore
as the second bully fired another beam. He unleashed a mighty fireball and it
hit one of the bullies hard. He had never done something like this before. He
then threatened he would fire another if they didn’t stop torturing the little
unicorn. His anger continued to increase as the bullies ignored him, despite
being hit. Night Flare was pushed to the limits. The necklace around his neck
was glowing brightly. Night Flare let out a scream of anger as his body glowed
a shade of red. He then was revealed with bat wings and flaming ears. He then
threatened the bullies who were now nervous. But in this form, he couldn’t
control his anger. He fired several fireballs at the bullies continuously. He
was so out of control that somepony was about to call Princess Celestia. But
then, he saw, in the bullies eyes’, a spec of forgiveness. The anger was about
to overwhelm him. But suddenly, he reverted back to his normal form. Once back
in his normal form, he noticed that his cutie mark appeared.

[Zygen 6,066]

Looks pretty cool I guess, I'm not a huge fan of Alicorns to be honest, but I think her color scheme is pretty good. I'm not really that good at making backstories so I'm not gonna bother critiquing that.

 

Looks pretty good overall.

[Courageous Thunder Dash 7,825]

Looks pretty cool I guess, I'm not a huge fan of Alicorns to be honest, but I think her color scheme is pretty good. I'm not really that good at making backstories so I'm not gonna bother critiquing that.

 

Looks pretty good overall.

 

It's a male. I decided to make it an alicorn, because there not many alicorn ocs out there. I don't know why people don't like alicorn ocs. 

[Zygen 6,066]

It's a male. I decided to make it an alicorn, because there not many alicorn ocs out there. I don't know why people don't like alicorn ocs. 

I mean I don't totally hate them or anything, I just find them kinda crammed with both wings and a horn for somereason. It feels like to much don't ask me why . I made my OC an Alicorn at first but he looked really ugly. So I changed him. I suppose it works in some situations.

 

Also on some ocations Alicorn OC's are just really crazy powerful.

 

I didn't really notice that problem with yours though, and I don't think you OC looks as ugly as mine as an Alicorn. Just saying its not my favorite or anything still .

[aRegularPony 306]

It's a male. I decided to make it an alicorn, because there not many alicorn ocs out there. I don't know why people don't like alicorn ocs. 

There was once a time where everyone had black and red alicorns with every power ever and skull/knife cutiemarks. These were the dark ages. This may have to do with why everyone hates alicorn OCs.

[Courageous Thunder Dash 7,825]

There was once a time where everyone had black and red alicorns with every power ever and skull/knife cutiemarks. These were the dark ages. This may have to do with why everyone hates alicorn OCs.

One may think he's a dark alicorn, but he isn't. Sure, he had a rough start, but he's not gonna turn and use his abilities for bad. Some people just don't know how to make a proper alicorn oc. 

[aRegularPony 306]

One may think he's a dark alicorn, but he isn't. Sure, he had a rough start, but he's not gonna turn and use his abilities for bad. Some people just don't know how to make a proper alicorn oc. 

I never said that he was going to be evil. I'm just saying that the reason not many people use alicorns as OCs is because they are usually really over-powered. Also, considering it's a stallion, maybe remove the eyelashes?