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[Commander Frost 731]

This is a romantic story that I would like help on.

 

The Visitor

 

It was a breezy night in Ponyville as Swift Blakeheart trotted through town.

"Ponyville is nice and all, but it's just like every other town I've been in. I'm sure I wont meet any friends here as well." He said aloud. He was so caught up in his thinking that he didn't even see the lovely mare as they crashed into each other.

"Oh I'm so sorry, I didn't see you there, I was just on my way home and,-"

"Well next time please watch were *looks at her* go-o-o-o-o-o-hello.

He had never seen a more beautiful mare in all of his life. She had yellow skin, a yellow and gray mane, big eyelashes, and a beautiful smile. He was lost in here baby blue eyes.

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The mare realized that the stallion was staring into her eyes as though she saw the world in them. "Um...excuse me?" she tentatively proffered.

 

Swift started. "Oh, I'm sorry. I just...got lost in thought, heh heh."

 

The mare glanced away. "Well...I guess I'll go home now." She was about to trot off.

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"Wait!" He called out. "Let me treat you to coffee, to apologize."

 

She thought about this for a moment.

"I cant, I have to get home to my son"

"Ah you have a boy? That's nice. Well at least let me offer to help you with your groceries. its the least that I could do. after all I did kind of crash into you."

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"Thank you," she murmured shyly.

 

"You are very welcome," Swift replied as he lifted most of the mare's sacks onto his shoulders. She took the rest, and led the way to her house.

 

They trotted in silence, before Swift ventured to ask, "I hope you don't mind my asking...but how is your boy? I'm curious..."

 

"Oh, I don't mind," the mare replied. "Many ponies have done the same thing." She then began a brief description of her son, smiling as she talked of him.

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"Thank you," she murmured shyly.

 

"You are very welcome," Swift replied as he lifted most of the mare's sacks onto his shoulders. She took the rest, and led the way to her house.

 

They trotted in silence, before Swift ventured to ask, "I hope you don't mind my asking...but how is your boy? I'm curious..."

 

"Oh, I don't mind," the mare replied. "Many ponies have done the same thing." She then began a brief description of her son, smiling as she talked of him.

"Well, he's seven." She began, "And he doesn't have his cutie mark, he loves using his imagination and he loves video games. His favorite food is a cupcake and ever since his dad died, he hasn't made any friends."

 

"Ah, well many children will crawl under a rock, as they say when their parents die." Swift replied.

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His dad died...which means her husband died. "I'm sorry to hear that he did. Die, that is."

 

"That's all right," the mare replied, though the sadness he saw in her face as she looked away told a different story. "We've learned to cope with it."

 

Suddenly Swift realized that he knew more about this mare than most he helped, and he didn't even know her name. And she didn't know his. "Wait a minute, where are my manners? My name is Swift Blakeheart. What's your name?"

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His dad died...which means her husband died. "I'm sorry to hear that he did. Die, that is."

 

"That's all right," the mare replied, though the sadness he saw in her face as she looked away told a different story. "We've learned to cope with it."

 

Suddenly Swift realized that he knew more about this mare than most he helped, and he didn't even know her name. And she didn't know his. "Wait a minute, where are my manners? My name is Swift Blakeheart. What's your name?"

"Oh, my name is Julia, Julia Brightwings."

"Pleasure. and I probably will sound rude when I ask but, what's your son's name?"

"Oh his name is Jason Brightwings. no cutie mark yet."

"Ah that's a lovely name. As is yours. So how far is your home?"

"Just around the block, I need to get home to him, his babysitter needs to leave."

"I could babysit for you."

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Julia paused. "Would you? That would be so wonderful - then I could finish my errands today instead of waiting until tomorrow!"

 

Swift smiled. "I absolutely would. I just need the number and I can go there right now."

 

"Thank you so much!" Julia gave Swift the number of her house and trotted off happily, knowing her son would be safe under Swift's care.

 

Swift flew for about a minute and then located Julia's house. It wasn't a fancy house, but it had clearly been taken good care of, and it was just the right size for a small family. Swift smiled as he knocked on the door.

 

"Who is it?" a voice called from inside.

 

"I'm Swift Blakeheart, and I'm here to babysit Jason for you, on behalf of his mother, so you can leave." He hoped that didn't sound weird.

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Julia paused. "Would you? That would be so wonderful - then I could finish my errands today instead of waiting until tomorrow!"

 

Swift smiled. "I absolutely would. I just need the number and I can go there right now."

 

"Thank you so much!" Julia gave Swift the number of her house and trotted off happily, knowing her son would be safe under Swift's care.

 

Swift flew for about a minute and then located Julia's house. It wasn't a fancy house, but it had clearly been taken good care of, and it was just the right size for a small family. Swift smiled as he knocked on the door.

 

"Who is it?" a voice called from inside.

 

"I'm Swift Blakeheart, and I'm here to babysit Jason for you, on behalf of his mother, so you can leave." He hoped that didn't sound weird.

An old Mare opened the door and said,

" Ah well, that's nice, I need to get back to the farm. I should have been asleep five hours ago."

"Oh, well have a good night miss." Swift Replied.

"You to goodnight. Oh and be careful with him, he doesn't open up easily. And he likes to pull jokes."

"Oh, ok. Thank you." He said.

Swift walked inside and saw a brown foal sitting on the floor playing with a train set.

"Umm, Hi there Jason. My name's swift, I'm here to babysit you." Swift said.

 

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"Mommy sent you?" Jason asked, looking up from the train set.

 

"Yes," Swift replied.

 

"Good," Jason said before turning his attention back to his trains.

 

There was a long period of silence, other than the sounds of the train moving along its track, before Swift at last said, "So...are you hungry? Because I am."

 

Jason nodded. "A little."

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"Mommy sent you?" Jason asked, looking up from the train set.

 

"Yes," Swift replied.

 

"Good," Jason said before turning his attention back to his trains.

 

There was a long period of silence, other than the sounds of the train moving along its track, before Swift at last said, "So...are you hungry? Because I am."

 

Jason nodded. "A little."

 

"That's good, What are you hungry for?" Swift asked.

 

 

"Umm, can I have a peanut butter sandwich?" He asked, still looking at his train set.

 

"Sure, oh wait are you allergic to peanut butter?" Swift asked.

 

"What?" Jason said with a confused face.

 

 

"Oh, yeah your only a colt. Umm, Have you ever had a peanut butter sandwich before?" Swift asked.

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Jason nodded, glancing up at Swift. "All the time."

 

Swift felt that this conversation was going nowhere. "Okay, well...I'll get you a peanut butter sandwich...and I'll get me something, too." He trotted into the kitchen, wondering how the rest of this babysitting was going to go.

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Jason nodded, glancing up at Swift. "All the time."

 

Swift felt that this conversation was going nowhere. "Okay, well...I'll get you a peanut butter sandwich...and I'll get me something, too." He trotted into the kitchen, wondering how the rest of this babysitting was going to go.

Ace returned minutes later and Jason was gone.

"Oh great. Jason? Jason?!" Swift called.

Jason hid on the stairs silently giggling at Swift trying to find him.

"Jason, come on please come out. We can play a game." Swift said.

He started searching Frantically for Jason.

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Ace returned minutes later and Jason was gone.
"Oh great. Jason? Jason?!" Swift called.
Jason hid on the stairs silently giggling at Swift trying to find him.
"Jason, come on please come out. We can play a game." Swift said.
He started searching Frantically for Jason.

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Jason giggled again, this time loud enough for Swift to hear. He stopped in the middle of the room, and smiled. "Oh, is that what this is? We're already playing a game! I see." He proceeded to make an exaggerated show of looking in the most obviously non-hiding places. "Oh, Jason...where are you?"

 

Jason smiled to himself.

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Jason giggled again, this time loud enough for Swift to hear. He stopped in the middle of the room, and smiled. "Oh, is that what this is? We're already playing a game! I see." He proceeded to make an exaggerated show of looking in the most obviously non-hiding places. "Oh, Jason...where are you?"

 

Jason smiled to himself.

Swift looked around and eventually saw a brown hoof hanging off the stairs  He looked up the stairs.

"Found you." He said with a slight giggle. "I made your sandwhich if you want it still. It's on the table in the living room."

He waited for Jason to come down.