Friendship is Homestuck (Feedback/Discussion)

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Hello all. If it's not too much trouble, I would appreciate some feedback on my little pride & joy of a fanfic. It's sort of a lengthy ongoing saga, so any nudges in the right direction with it are appreciated! Since it's a Homestuck crossover, some knowledge of the webcomic would be helpful but perhaps not necessary.

 

The basic story is that the mane six are told to play a version of sBurb by Celestia, not knowing anything about what they're getting themselves into. Well, for the most part, but you'll have to read to see what I mean by that

 

The story can be found here, so if anyone would like to read and (nicely) critique then have at it!