fan fiction Pipe Dreams

[Storm Wind 5]

Alrighty, guess I'll post this here. This is the first fanfiction I have made. Ended up having to cut it down quite a bit since I had a limit of about 5 pages. Which is why it seems to lack description at some parts and can seem to move too fast in terms of emotions the character is feeling.

There is no gore and only a slight amount of blood mentioned.

 

http://www.fimfictio...245/Pipe-Dreams

 

For anyone that doesn't like reading on fimfiction, I also put it on deviantART:

 

http://storm-windoc....t.com/#/d4s8kqs

 

Funny side note, this was supposed to be a dark spinoff story for a series I am currently working on but ended up finishing it long before I will even finish the first chapter of the series.

 

Of course, criticism is sought to help me become a better writer, I know it isn't great and criticism helps a lot.