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Hey all, I just released my track and was looking for some critique. Mixing, composition, sound design, anything. Just give it to me straight. :)

 

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Thanks,

 

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Well it does make me think of chickens in a way. It has a decent low beat but it got kinda boring after about a minute and a half. Maybe you could give the composition some more colour and emotion before the end. I did like what you did around 3:40-4:20 changing it up a bit. All in all, it's alright, but I wasn't blown away by it.

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Over all mixing is ok but the snare needs to poke through a little bit. Its fine on its own but when everything else is going on it struggles. I would also calm down on the pew pew sounds in the intro. Less is more. The composition is pretty darn cool man i really like it. maybe a few different hi hat samples mixed in will give a nice touch of variation, get creative with the percussion's. I didn't get to bored before the nice change at 3:40 I quite liked the progression but some other people might like a bit more change like our friend above me. (purely a personal thing really). but yeah your sounds get a little bit dynamic here and there which is nice.

 

My advice would just find a way to get they snare to be more present, a snare can make or break a song. I dont know how much you've compressed the song but once the compressor goes under load from everything else the snare definitely suffocates.   

 

thats my 2 cents if it worth anything  :derp: good job man!

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"Flying SpYder"

 

It's sad that even a spider can fly but Scootaloo can't...

 

But seriously it's pretty catchy if not a little repetitive. I'm not an electronic music aficionado though so Rainbow-Crash is probably the one to listen to on this.


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Thanks everyone for the responses. :D

 

Well it does make me think of chickens in a way. It has a decent low beat but it got kinda boring after about a minute and a half. Maybe you could give the composition some more colour and emotion before the end. I did like what you did around 3:40-4:20 changing it up a bit. All in all, it's alright, but I wasn't blown away by it.

Yeah, composition is probably the biggest thing I'm dealing with. There's just so much things you could do and it's really hard to not overdo it. Glad you liked the break; I tried to keep it interesting.

 

Over all mixing is ok but the snare needs to poke through a little bit. Its fine on its own but when everything else is going on it struggles. I would also calm down on the pew pew sounds in the intro. Less is more. The composition is pretty darn cool man i really like it. maybe a few different hi hat samples mixed in will give a nice touch of variation, get creative with the percussion's. I didn't get to bored before the nice change at 3:40 I quite liked the progression but some other people might like a bit more change like our friend above me. (purely a personal thing really). but yeah your sounds get a little bit dynamic here and there which is nice.

 

My advice would just find a way to get they snare to be more present, a snare can make or break a song. I dont know how much you've compressed the song but once the compressor goes under load from everything else the snare definitely suffocates.

 

thats my 2 cents if it worth anything :derp: good job man!

Thanks for the kind words. :)

 

I see what you mean, I know it wasn't too present in the low-mid area; perhaps a boost would suffice? There wasn't a lot of compression added to the drums before I mastered it, but it sounds fine outside of the noisier sections, like you said. Just a mix problem I suppose.

 

I'm glad you liked it. :D

 

 

"Flying SpYder"

 

It's sad that even a spider can fly but Scootaloo can't...

 

But seriously it's pretty catchy if not a little repetitive. I'm not an electronic music aficionado though so Rainbow-Crash is probably the one to listen to on this.

Hey, any bit counts. I had another guy say that as well. It's definitely something I need to work on.

 

Ha, this spider might fly if I get my production sounding good.

 

Thanks again for the response. :)

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Needless to say, THIS happened.

 

 

 

 

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In this world, is the destiny of mankind controlled by some transcendental entity or law? Is it like the hand of God, hovering above? At least it is true, that man has no control... Even over his own will.

 

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