critique wanted Some feed back on my newest oc?

[Izanagi 176]

https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/soularius-r9038


here is the link of my newest oc. i am not..incredibly ok with the name, but i can live with it. but if you have some new ones, i'll happily have at it =3 

but what i want most is what do you think of this oc, and is there anything i should change?

[LHfunk 422]

Looks like a pretty nice OC too me! Neat name, nice backstory, good design. The only problem I have with it is that I don't like those colors together. Other then that (and that doesn't really even matter), it's great!

[Overlord0909 479]

Looks like a pretty nice OC too me! Neat name, nice backstory, good design. The only problem I have with it is that I don't like those colors together. Other then that (and that doesn't really even matter), it's great!

Agreed. Get those colours fixed... If you want.

Nice everything else though!

[BlueBrony 388]

Nice OC. The backstory was nicely thought out and refreshingly not over-ambitious in its accomplishments.

 

On appearance: I feel like a few tweaks would make him look a lot better. For instance, I would make the blue coat a little lighter (think pastels). The manestyle works, its just that the mane color clashes with the eyes. Perhaps you could experiment with different eye/mane colors?

 

In the personality section: it is a little confusing that you use both calm and hot-headed to describe him, but I can see what you are trying to get across.

 

alternate name ideas:

Sharp Steel

Riposte (a quick counter-move in swordfighting)

Iron Ward (Ward is a defensive position in fencing)