planning FoE: Aftermath; After the Fact (1x1 with Meson Bolt)

[Kronos the Revenant 1,971]

1x1 with Meson Bolt, branching off of prior RP, FoE: Aftermath. Title is a work in progress.

 

 

RP: https://mlpforums.com/topic/154071-foe-aftermath-after-the-fact-1x1-with-meson-bolt/

Edited October 17, 2016 by Kronos the Revenant

[Meson Bolt 2,648]

...Well, here's my character link, just in case you need it:

 

https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/foray-4amul3r109-r9193

[Kronos the Revenant 1,971]

Alright, no need to really have it confirmed for use, really.

But, since we're gonna be doing this anyways, might as well: https://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/kronos-foe-r9358

[Meson Bolt 2,648]

Right, ahh... you gonna create the actual RP page?

[Kronos the Revenant 1,971]

Eeyup, here it is: https://mlpforums.com/topic/154071-foe-aftermath-after-the-fact-1x1-with-meson-bolt/

[Meson Bolt 2,648]

Eh, not to be rude but... mind explaining what just happened?

[Kronos the Revenant 1,971]

The part of Kronos' brain that's a computer did something to him similar to what PTSD does to a soldier.

[Meson Bolt 2,648]

That's not much of an explanation...

 

What caused it? Is it actual PTSD or just something like it? And why did you have that happen at that moment?

 

If I don't get some info, I can't really have Foray react accordingly. XD

[Kronos the Revenant 1,971]

It's just something like that. Here's the best explanation I can give you: Kronos' brain is 1/4 computer, which mainly stores all forms of memory in his system. Every once in a while, a traumatic memory from his past comes up, causing Kronos to have a "PTSD" episode. In a way, it's something like PTSD. It usually happens if he or someone else mentions anything having to do with a traumatic event or if something somehow gets him to inadvertently remember something traumatic, such as his own recollection of his own memories, which rarely ever happens. That being said, this'll be one of the rare times that that'll happen.

[Meson Bolt 2,648]

Right, ahh...

 

Just a suggestion -- if you're trying to write a character with something similar to post-traumatic stress disorder... I'd research a bit more about it and how to implement it better to your character. Here's a couple good links:

 

http://writeworld.org/post/37760448322/writing-ptsd-and-other-mental-disorders

 

http://www.nimh.nih.gov/health/topics/post-traumatic-stress-disorder-ptsd/index.shtml

 

As far as I know (and I don't know a lot, but...) PTSD doesn't invoke headaches or losing consciousness. And I stand by what Foray said, he was overly-dramatic about it... and it kinda looked like he was just vying for sympathy

 

Sorry if I'm coming off as harsh, but this is a common writer's mistake and it's super annoying. I know because I've annoyed several people with one of my own mentally-unstable characters before, so... yeah, I'm not perfect. XD

[Kronos the Revenant 1,971]

Well, I didn't say that he has PTSD exactly, per say, but rather, remember, he's a cyborg who's cybernetics have been altered from the conditions of the wasteland, so, in a way, this is probably his cybernetic parts malfunctioning and working a different way, thus causing these spastic episodes Kronos is having.

I'm not sure if that makes any sense whatsoever, but that's probably a more definitive definition I can give for that behaviour

[Meson Bolt 2,648]

Yeah, the point is it's super obvious he wants attention/sympathy. I just want to help you not do this again, since you'll likely embarrass yourself.

 

Like... seriously, be glad this is a 1x1 RP.

[Kronos the Revenant 1,971]

Yeah, okay. I gets it. Still, i figured that that would've become an interesting thing about him, but you pointed out some things that seems out of place. Thanks.

[Meson Bolt 2,648]

Eh... PTSD (and all mental disorders) are only interesting when they make sense. For example... well, Foray's irrationally afraid of both Leviathan Power Armor and radroaches, simply because she's watched both of them kill someone close to her (and almost kill her too).

 

Random mental breakdowns based on some computer malfunctions, however, is a much less interesting disorder.

[Kronos the Revenant 1,971]

Yeah, i guess so. Still, it's a thing about him being in the wasteland for so long that he's like this. I thought that it'll make sense for someone like him........am I trying way too hard to make him seem interesting?

[Meson Bolt 2,648]

Having mental breakdowns isn't something that just "happens", even if it's a result of him wandering the wasteland. They have to be triggered by something. Again with Foray, she has to either see a Levi or see (or hear) a radroach to freak out.

 

If say, something damaged his computer and he's still shaken up about it, then if he sees something similar to that thing, it would be triggered, that'd be better.

 

And yeah, you probably are, actually. Characters should be interesting and likable because of their personality, likes, and dislikes. If you're relying too much on powers, weaknesses, or backstory to make your character interesting, you might wanna check the first three.

[Kronos the Revenant 1,971]

Hmm, okay, i see what I've been doing wrong this whole time. Thanks.

[Meson Bolt 2,648]

Go ahead and post again. Foray's not really doing much right now, just keeping the fire alive and waiting for him to return -- not enough to meet 200 words. ^^;

[Kronos the Revenant 1,971]

Oh, okay. I'll just fast forward him a couple of hours.

[Meson Bolt 2,648]

Sorry for not being active, I've been dealing with family issues and stuff, and roleplaying on the phone isn't exactly appealing. :/

[Kronos the Revenant 1,971]

It's okay. I started a Borderlands-esque RP with some other members, so i was pre-occupied.

[Meson Bolt 2,648]

It's okay. I started a Borderlands-esque RP with some other members, so i was pre-occupied.

Hey, uh... I may have found a way to easily continue RPing. If you're still interested...

[Kronos the Revenant 1,971]

Hey, uh... I may have found a way to easily continue RPing. If you're still interested...

Still am, buddy. Just posted not too long ago. :3

[Meson Bolt 2,648]

So ah, yeah... two questions. First, where do you want the story to go, and secondly, are you pushing for Kronos and Foray to be in a relationship?

[Kronos the Revenant 1,971]

I'm just gonna go wherever you want the story to go and whether or not a Kronos x Foray thing should be going on should be up to you. I mean, in the Borderlands RP I'm in, Spectre is thinking about shipping his character with Kronos as well, and it's another guy. So, basically, it's up to you where the story goes in terms of plot and relationship

Edited September 7, 2016 by Kronos the Revenant