I drew: Fluttershy/Pinkie Pie & Derpy (NEW IMAGE 7/25), (Critique please)

[Glaceon 793]

Amazing I like how you did the Pinkie Pie one. Keep up the good work!

[Alaxandir 93]

Thanks for all the great feedback everypony!

 

I know the lines aren't straight, I leave them imperfect and a bit squiggly on purpose Its all hand drawn and I dont use vectoring tools

[Hazardus_Havard. 480]

Her wing looks a bit off, like it's too straight. Aside from that, a second wing on top of it, even if it's shown a tiny bit, would help the image since it appears like she only has one wing in the image right now. The cutie mark is off too, the thunderbolt is pushed too far away from the cloud; it should be situated in the middle of the cloud.

 

Other than that, it's a nice representation of Rainbow Dash. It's great to see something like this over everyone just generally take that stupid pony creator and throw some color on it claiming it as their actual work. ALL of my vector work is hand drawn so it peeves me a bit seeing that.

 

If at all possible, maybe a different color for the sky could help since the one right now is a bit bland.

[Lacey Shadows 164]

How long did it take you make these? (Just out of curiosity)

 

I do think these look good, however I would of omitted those crayon looking rainbow lines, I would've kept it simple

[Alaxandir 93]

There is a simple version on my deviant art. zergling2010.deviantart.com

 

Pinkie pie took 2.5hrs.

Fillie pie was 1.5. Hrs

Rd was around 3 hrs

Happy Birthday Fluttershy was 6.5 hours

 

Thanks for the feedback. You're right about the wings. Keep it coming. Any requests for my next?

Edited July 25, 2012 by Alaxandir

[Lolness The Hunt 39]

Like I said in the stream, it looks really good.

 

I don't really see anything wrong with it, except for the fact that Fluttershy doesn't seem to be looking at anything in particular (you probably know that though). Still, good job.

[Alaxandir 93]

Please bring up my post for great justice! I wish for more people to critique my newest work! Thank you for your understanding!

[Felix 1,363]

It's great! Fluttershy looks adorable in this one.

[~Chaos~ 3,973]

Wow, that's a pretty wonderful drawing, as far as I can see, there isn't much for me to critique, I also love Derpy stalking around as usual!

 

Great job on this

[Alaxandir 93]

Wow, that's a pretty wonderful drawing, as far as I can see, there isn't much for me to critique, I also love Derpy stalking around as usual!

 

Great job on this

 

Thanks a lot for the comment! I love the broohoofs but I wish people people would comment like this!

[IrishQueen1517 74]

oh my gosh i love it! its amazing thats really good ur really good at drawing its .... wow

[Pencil Hoof 169]

first things first.

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There. Now you can put your hoof down (I'm sure it was starting to hurt ).

Now onto the pictures. The first image is good, and I can tell you put a lot of time into it considering the scale of the image, elements, and coloring. The head size of both pinkie and fluttershy are a little big in comparison to their bodies. Also, fluttershy's irises (the colored rings around the center (I think that's the right term)) are too thick compared to the other parts of the eye, while Pinkie's are a little too thin.

Onto the rainbowdash sonic rainboom picture.

I'll get the negative out of the way first, so I can finish in a high note.

The body is a little stretched. It should be a little smaller than the head (I think). All of these things aren't too hard to fix though, and don't detract much from the picture, so no worries

Positive note:

DAT. RAINBOOM. Easily the most sexy interpretation of the pre rainboom tube I've seen. The coloured and lines that surround are wonderful a and unique. The textures you chose for the lines? OH! Even Rarity would have to say the choice was beyond fabulous. It makes the picture look really dynamic, and uses the diagonals, wrapping and white spaces in between to create a great sense of movement. And you probably thought I wouldn't notice, but that background was genius. There's a perfect balance between white space and colour and the paint blotches just look great. They keep the background from looking plain without detracting from the focal point - DAT. RAINBOOM.

Keep it up. These were a joy to look at, and I hope to see more. Also, extra kudos for the time you put into these. That sort of dedication improves your art in leaps and bounds -believe me, I would know (if I didn't out those kind of hours in, I would still be drawing like a four year old XD).

[Alaxandir 93]

 

Thanks so much for all your time in writing that critique, thats exactly the kind of thing im looking for. I agree with you on everything you've pointed out and just wanted to post a thanks for that great post.