The MMMM Conspiracy (My first fanfic)

[The Pirate Prince 105]

Hello everybrony. I was writing a fan-fic for this: http://mlpforums.com...nfic-challenge/

 

When I reread the rules and realized it didn't allow OCs. So I decided to carry on writing with my OC, go over the 500 word limit (now 750) and post it here. I haven't done any fan fics before and this is the first time I've done any creative writing in years, but I'm quite happy how it turned out. Please give feed back.

P.S. It's set during "MMMystery on the Friendship Express." so please be familiar with the episode before reading.

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The MMMM Conspiracy

 

The three ponies bowed there heads in turn, each asking for forgiveness from their poofy haired friend.

“But I'm really, really sorry.”

“Terribly sorry.”

“Sorry Pinkie.”

As she watched them, Twilight Sparkle felt a wave of satisfaction. She had presented her evidence, created a logical theory, and everypony (and griffon and mule) had accepted it.

“That's OK. At least this mystery is finally solved.”

Everypony, except one.

“Not so fast, Miss Pie!” They turned to see a grey unicorn with brown spots walk into the carriage. “The name's Spotted Glass. I'm a private detective .” The pony motioned to his cutiemark, a dirty magnifying glass.”

Pinkie Pie giggled, “Hee, hee, Spotted Dick.”

The unicorn nodded, “Quite. A fitting name for this confectionery caper. I've been listening in to your predicament and I'm afraid it may not be as simple as it seems.”

“B-but, they already admitted to eating the cake.” Twilight stuttered.

“True, but I still have some questions.” said the stranger, using magic to place the deerstalker onto his head and rubbed the pipe on his side.

Twilight turned, “What do you think, Pinkie?”

“It's fine, he's just a self-insert OC” she replied, not noticing Twilight confused look. “Fire away mister Dick.”

 

“Thank you. Now, as I understand it, you six are the bearers of the Elements of Harmony, correct?”

“Yeah, what of it?” answered Rainbow Dash.

“You, Rainbow Dash, represent loyalty, Miss Fluttershy here represents kindness and Miss Rarity, generosity.” Explained the detective, placing pipe in his mouth, giving it a brief bubble. “Now, isn't taking a bite of your friend's cake rather disloyal?

“Well, yeah, I guess.”

“And it's rather unkind and not very generous.” The unicorn continued.“And Miss Applejack here represents the Element of Honesty, so I'm sure she would have confessed if she had committed the crime. Leaving only...” The detective slowly turned to face his prey. “you, Miss Sparkle.”

 

“What? Me? B-but, what about the clues?” she protested.

“Ah, yes. Did anyone else see these 'clues' before you removed them from the crime scene?” He asked.

“No, she wouldn't let me see.” said Pinkie, now suspicious of her magical friend.

“And she just happened to find the three exact pieces of incriminating evidence needed. Now, how likely is it that all three of them would leave conclusive evidence?”

“Now tha' does sound a bit unlikely.” Applejack admitted.

 

“Now, now come on. If I did it, why would they confess?”

“Because they believed they had done it. You used magic to make them dream they had taken bites out of the MMMM. You collected your evidence while they slept and used your teleportation to evade Pinkie Pie.”

“But.. but.. but how I don't know how modify someone's dream.” whimpered Twilight Sparkle, close to tears.

“No. But you don't need to know something if you can read.” Spotted Glass levitated a book from the sleeping carriage and threw it on the ground. Its title, 'Hypnosis: controlling sleep through magic.'

 

“You mean she was planning this from the beginning?” Rarity exclaimed.

“I doubt it, she probably brought it to help herself sleep. These trains can make it hard to get to sleep for people used to the peace and quite of small towns.”

“Twilight!” Pinkie yelled, facing her purple friend “Is this true?”

Twilight cried loudly, unable to reply.

“Twilight, why would you do this us?” Rainbow Dash demanded.

“*Sniff* I'm.. I'm so sorry. I just.. I just wanted to have some of the cake. Can you ever forgive me? *Sniff*”

 

It took a lot of talking, promises and I.O.U.s before the girls forgave Twilight. Meanwhile, the three chefs quietly admitted their guilt to ruining each others desserts. It took everypony by surprise when the train pulled into the station.

“Oh no.”yelled Pinkie Pie, “The competition is starting soon. I had a plan on combining all our dessert into an awesome, super dessert, but now it's too late.”

“We'll just have to hope the judges value taste over presentation.” sighed Rarity.

 

The judges did not value taste over presentation. The four of them came joint last place. In the evening, in his hotel room, the winner was enjoying his creation, a current filled pudding covered in custard. He chuckled to himself as the spell he used to hide his cutie-mark faded, turning the image on his flank from a magnifying glass to a trio of Zs.