My Little Dashie Review

[Unified Draft 131]

Last night I was touched by the fanfic, My Little Dashie. I won't lie I did cry, this fanfic was so good and it was also very sad. The story starts with a guy ( his name is not mentioned throughout the fanfic) walking down the street, he lives in a once very nice city but it was not so nice in the setting we find him in. While he is walking home he finds a box in the middle of the street he goes to the box and inside he finds a filly Rainbow Dash.He takes her with him and they go home. The guy has no idea how old Rainbow Dash is so he assumes that she is 5 years old. That is all I'm going to tell you if you want to know what happens read the fanfic My Little Dashie or go on YouTube and type in My Little Dashie read by Mic the Microphone rather way I'm sure you will leave with tears, but still it is a really good fanfic. If you have read this leave your thoughts in the comment section. Until next time I'm Brohoof117, stay 20% cooler MLP Forums.

[Fluffykins the Cat 139]

Wow, by looking at what you said, I would say the plot is good, but since Rainbow Dash is in the real world, I can't read it or then I will feel jelose.

[Unified Draft 131]

It was a really good fanfic I highly recommend it

[Fluffykins the Cat 139]

Wait, how come you get a shorter character limit? Oh well, nothing to say. If I read it, i will get unhappy and wonder "When will Rainbow Dash come to my house?".

[PonyEcho 1,610]

this isnt rely a review it just un-bias praise nothing more nothing less and it add to the number of MLD topics.

i found this fan fic to be highly over rated and more depressing then sad its major flaw being the very beginning of the story were the world is made to be dead and the main character to be empty and emotionally unstable (which is a bad thing since so many bronies will desperately try to attach themselves to him ) this then follows in to the farther daughter bonding second act which i think is the height of the story and make me smile when i read it but still its not that good to redeem itself from the half assed and god awful ending and with out spoiling i'll just say this, the writer rely just wanted to finish the story rather then add any though and likely had RD letter already written out before starting the story and wanted to rush to that rather then add some kind of detailed explanation as to how RD entered the real world( note I can do better which isn't a good thing because if you have a reader think that it not a good sigh) couple that up with a cheap mane six cameo and you have a shitty fan fic that fails the hype and will only be like by those who have a blinding devotion to MLP and Rambowdash who is to put it in to simple terms a badly written character.

( note my opinion )

 

 

Wait, how come you get a shorter character limit? Oh well, nothing to say. If I read it, i will get unhappy and wonder "When will Rainbow Dash come to my house?".

 

the character limit only starts when you hit muffin i think. Edited September 16, 2012 by PonyEcho

[Unified Draft 131]

I will say I found it depressing and very sad but I still liked it. Though the one part I thought was weird was how the mane six came into the story. All though I still really liked it

[Sneaky 54]

It was a great story, really, but there was almost no dialogue of RD before she was 20, and the way the mane 6 and Celestia were introduced really left a lot to be desired. Knocking on the door? He could've done better than that. Also, this story relies a lot on sadness. If you think about it, the story is heartwarming, but you feel no real connection to the characters until near the end. Just a thought.

 

But since I read it last night, the depression of the story is still wearing off. Darn you, Dashie.

[Unified Draft 131]

That's exactly what I thought it was heartwarming I just thought towards the end the writer didn't give it much though

 

 

I recommend you don't read that and cupcakes on the same day or you will have a bad day

[~Muffin of Chaos~ 184]

I found this video to be kind of touching... So many people say it was rushed with the Mane 6 and Celestia... I literally cried after reading this...

[Unified Draft 131]

Same here

[Cranium Tyranus 216]

I liked it. Sure it has it's own problems, what fanfic is perfect? But it's rather touching.

The whole, mane 6(5 technically, since rainbow was already there.) and Celestia just waltzing through the door was a little hard to stomach, but it had it's purpose. Overall I would say that "My Little Dashie" did what it was trying to do, convey the life of a sad individual who happens across a small miracle that, over the course of 15 years, changed him from being a cynical, anti-social, individual into an, admittedly over-dramatic, father figure. Whom instead of being devastated or angry that Rainbow had been taken from him, he was instead grateful for what the little "accident" had done for him.

 

So all-in-all I give it an 8/10.

[Unified Draft 131]

I started to get really emotional towards the middle when Rainbow Dash ran away

[Clarity 3,094]

I agree that it gave me the feels. I didn't cry though, and I certainly don't feel "heartless" for not doing so.

 

It was well written, but too rushed. Too unoriginal, because there are already tons of fanfics about human relationships with Rainbow Dash running around. Self-inserts are always taking the shine off a bit, because they make you feel all sorry for them, when he says all the dying city things and the death of parents. Too many tragic-past-makes-me-feel-strong stores, so when RD leaves the main character you would instantly bawl because of that.

 

Well, besides that, it was pretty good. I have to admit it made me think that Rainbow Dash was my favorite character for about a week.

[Unified Draft 131]

Ya because right now and for a while RD has been my favorite character

[~SadisticFluttershy~ 779]

My Thoughts on the story was absolutely fantastic.. Very well written with a good story line..

But also there are many gaps inbetween the story, which explains the other after stories like MyLittleDashie-First bath or After years.

 

But it's a very emotional story because it has touched alot of ponies hearts. It's always heart breaking to have someone like Rainbow to be taken way from you after 15 years of being with her or them, it's difficult for some people.. but as people said he was greatful that he had a daughter for 15 years and enjoyed em while they could and that's the happy part, but when it came when she found out the truth in the middle of the story, that's when the reader knows things will turn south quickly and the emotions will break out.

i Give this a 9/10 because it's a excellent story and i recommend it to anyone, this would make a excellent movie and a chapter book.

 

EDIT: I Forgot to add one thing, This story connects to real life events, i believe it does, because stuff like this happens to people every single day.. not just here or there, but everywhere, so i really believe that this is also based off every day life.

Edited September 17, 2012 by FIuttershy

[PonyEcho 1,610]

I agree that it gave me the feels. I didn't cry though, and I certainly don't feel "heartless" for not doing so.

 

It was well written, but too rushed. Too unoriginal, because there are already tons of fanfics about human relationships with Rainbow Dash running around. Self-inserts are always taking the shine off a bit, because they make you feel all sorry for them, when he says all the dying city things and the death of parents. Too many tragic-past-makes-me-feel-strong stores, so when RD leaves the main character you would instantly bawl because of that.

 

Well, besides that, it was pretty good. I have to admit it made me think that Rainbow Dash was my favorite character for about a week.

 

yeah i think this got the attention of people because it was a insert RD story that wasn't shipping, and also its more of a 'what if 'story so that whole dead world and borderline suicidal main character which bronies will try to relate to (note: this pisses me off) seem unnecessary yet also unnecessary so it can go though the 15 years with out ever being caught or understanding her origins. also i find it funny how so many people are trying to mine from this fan fic in an attempt to make lighting strike twice and the movie... bleh the fan fic cannot support a movie so i'll call it now, the movie is gonna have good animation editing but it'll be no Who framed roger rabbit and the acting and script will be horrible.

 

 

EDIT: I Forgot to add one thing, This story connects to real life events, i believe it does, because stuff like this happens to people every single day.. not just here or there, but everywhere, so i really believe that this is also based off every day life.

 

could you go into detail as to how this effects people every day (i mean the RD in RL and the dead world, also the emotionally unstable part bronie part )

[~SadisticFluttershy~ 779]

Basically, it's not like relative by animation or freaky portals.

 

It's like this, Let's say you have had a dog for 6 years, right? and you had to move to another place because you can't afford where you are currently living in, so you move into a apartment complex that doesn't allow dogs, so you try to have someone in your family to take the dog off your hands but you still own the dog, but no one is willing to do so, so you have to give the dog away to someone you don't know and can never see the dog again.(This has happend to me when i was younger) And your left in your new home without your companion so your heartbroken.

 

Taking stuff from my little dashie, As you know the Guy found rainbow dash when she was a filly, and he takes her home and has had her for 15 years and they were a family(Like a Human and a dog) and isn't able to keep rainbow dash forever because she can't live in the real world because they were different.(Back to dogs, the thing with dogs is a different scenario by species and dogs are real, Ponies aren't.) And Princess Celestia had to take Rainbow from her father, and could never see her again.

 

If you read this more carefully PonyEcho, stuff like this, does happen to people in Real life.. as i said, its happend to me when i was at a very young age, and i was heartbroken.

Edited September 17, 2012 by FIuttershy

[Sneaky 54]

 

 

could you go into detail as to how this effects people every day (i mean the RD in RL and the dead world, also the emotionally unstable part bronie part )

 

I don't think he means that you're going to find RD in a box somewhere (and if you do, tell me) but have you ever heard of a child changing someone's life for the better, simply by existing in it? It's the same here. And in the end, it seems like such a horrible thing that she's being taken away, but the narrator is just glad to ever have had her in his life.

 

Dangit, I'm getting emotional now. You get my point.

[PonyEcho 1,610]

Basically, it's not like relative by animation or freaky portals.

 

It's like this, Let's say you have had a dog for 6 years, right? and you had to move to another place because you can't afford where you are currently living in, so you move into a apartment complex that doesn't allow dogs, so you try to have someone in your family to take the dog off your hands but you still own the dog, but no one is willing to do so, so you have to give the dog away to someone you don't know and can never see the dog again.(This has happend to me when i was younger) And your left in your new home without your companion so your heartbroken.

 

Taking stuff from my little dashie, As you know the Guy found rainbow dash when she was a filly, and he takes her home and has had her for 15 years and they were a family(Like a Human and a dog) and isn't able to keep rainbow dash forever because she can't live in the real world because they were different.(Back to dogs, the thing with dogs is a different scenario by species and dogs are real, Ponies aren't.) And Princess Celestia had to take Rainbow from her father, and could never see her again.

 

If you read this more carefully PonyEcho, stuff like this, does happen to people in Real life.. as i said, its happend to me when i was at a very young age, and i was heartbroken.

 

(if only there were more bronies like maybe i would'nt be such a anti-brony)

i see your point, but its more about RD being 20 human years old so her still being with the farther is weird and this why i think the writer threw in the cheap mane six and Celestia cameo rather then something creative. it doesn't rely make the story any better its still flawed and rushed near the end.

[Unified Draft 131]

I thought if the writter was going to use the main 6 he could've found a better way to help the m fit in with it

[Arcanel 3,041]

(if only there were more bronies like maybe i would'nt be such a anti-brony)

i see your point, but its more about RD being 20 human years old so her still being with the farther is weird and this why i think the writer threw in the cheap mane six and Celestia cameo rather then something creative. it doesn't rely make the story any better its still flawed and rushed near the end.

 

I'd like to ask why you are an anti-brony, but eh, not my point to ask and I won't bother you about it . Anyway, on to the point at hand. On to one of your previous comments, you said that the character is mentally unstable...I don't think that would be the correct word for it, I think it's too strong. Rather just...sad. It's not like he is planning suicide or anything like that, nor wilhe go insane if he spent one more day on that world. He's just...sad. The moment he finds something in his life that could make him happy, well, I'm pretty sure anyone in the world would be so Celestiadamned overprotective they'd almost look insane, being a brony or not aside. And also, I'm not sure about the others but...I don't think the end was rushed, rather, that it makes sense. While very little time had passed, Twilight and co. WOULD worry enough about Rainbow to go looking for her. And of course they'd rather go straight to the source if needed be, rather than do anything else. This of course, doesn't mean that they are going to go and knowck down the door or something like that . This is just my opinion. I'm almost betting to believe that ROBCakeran53 (the author), in that moment of inspiration of writing, thought that too much time had passed for the others to NOT come and get Dash. That's probably when he thought of the different time passing of each world, so as to make the mane 6's reaccion to Rainbow DAsh not being found more fast and believable. To be honest, I had forgotten how "love it or hate it" MLD had become . And I think the movie will actually be better than the story. The producer did say, that the script WAS going to be different than that of the story, which gives him more leverage in what to use to make the story sound better than the original MLD did, if there was ever the need.

 

Also, just curious, what would YOU have done with the ending? I mean, I'm intrigued, to be honest. I don't think I could generate a different way to find how the story could have been written right now (although, it could be that it is 9 Am ).

 

 

I agree that it gave me the feels. I didn't cry though, and I certainly don't feel "heartless" for not doing so.

 

It was well written, but too rushed. Too unoriginal, because there are already tons of fanfics about human relationships with Rainbow Dash running around. Self-inserts are always taking the shine off a bit, because they make you feel all sorry for them, when he says all the dying city things and the death of parents. Too many tragic-past-makes-me-feel-strong stores, so when RD leaves the main character you would instantly bawl because of that.

 

Well, besides that, it was pretty good. I have to admit it made me think that Rainbow Dash was my favorite character for about a week.

 

Well, My Little Dashie could be considered an old story by now. I can't even remember when was it posted. So, while at that time here many self-insert shipping stories, MLD might have been the one to break the mold on THAT regard, and make a father-daughter relationship, EVEN THOUGH it used a "dead" space, so to speak. Then again, I'm not sure on this one, because I think MLD was posted before I joined in the brony community, back in October last year

[PonyEcho 1,610]

@@Arcanel,

crap i did say mentally unstable :/ my bad that probably from the last MLD discussion about the story relating to mental illness, its more emotionally unstable but the main characters view of the world as dead witch was writen to make it appear on the edge and hopeless making RD introduction to the story stronger and then after a few years with rainbowdash the world around him starts to regenerate and actualy that kind of works but the depressing beginning is still a low point.

 

as for the ending the problem with it is this, the mane 5 and celestia would have try to find RD sooner not 15 years not stopping until they find away and not explain how RD entered the world, it just serves as a means to an end its just 'oh the mane six have suddenly appeared to take RD away... sure' and i would have cut that out because its a cheap cameo that try's to take away for the main story about the farther daughter stuff and i would have made it more around the Sonic rainboom being the cause an solution to RD being in the human world so when she doe's the rainboom in the human world she gets a glimpse of Equestria and then finding out the truth of her origins so it becomes her decision, does she remain with her farther and never do another sonic rainboom or return to Equestria, but that just me i'm no writer.

 

as for why I'm an anti-brony, its hard to explain , its probably thread worthy but i wont make one

Edited September 18, 2012 by PonyEcho

[Arcanel 3,041]

@@Arcanel,

crap i did say mentally unstable :/ my bad that probably from the last MLD discussion about the story relating to mental illness, its more emotionally unstable but the main characters view of the world as dead witch was writen to make it appear on the edge and hopeless making RD introduction to the story stronger and then after a few years with rainbowdash the world around him starts to regenerate and actualy that kind of works but the depressing beginning is still a low point.

 

as for the ending the problem with it is this, the mane 5 and celestia would have try to find RD sooner not 15 years not stopping until they find away and not explain how RD entered the world, it just serves as a means to an end its just 'oh the mane six have suddenly appeared to take RD away... sure' and i would have cut that out because its a cheap cameo that try's to take away for the main story about the farther daughter stuff and i would have made it more around the Sonic rainboom being the cause an solution to RD being in the human world so when she doe's the rainboom in the human world she gets a glimpse of Equestria and then finding out the truth of her origins so it becomes her decision, does she remain with her farther and never do another sonic rainboom or return to Equestria, but that just me i'm no writer.

 

as for why I'm an anti-brony, its hard to explain , its probably thread worthy but i wont make one

 

I see...no problem . Still, I CAN agree that most stories DO treat the depression part of it. I honestly don't care so long as that part gives you the feels for it. Like, you really get in character with it, regardless of who you are (which is what any writer should strive for). There needs to be more stories with a more...er...happier tone, or at least different tone for the characters in question, for this type of stories. Then again, MLD IS old, so to speak. I'm not sure how much divierse were the things were back then. I joined the bronies and community back in October last year, and I'm pretty sure MLD was from before that. So, to be honest, on that regard, I'm not sure. And finally, on the Sonic Rainboom advance (don't take this the wrong way. But since I'm a writer (or a rookie writer, whatever ), I kinda do get intrigued and hype on these things ), there's just a slight problem with that. You'd probably need to make the story longer than it should. Because, while we are not sure of when exactly the timeline of the current show is, I'm guessing Rainbow had probably done more Sonic Rainbooms, and if those make an effect on the "real" world, on Equestria, they should too. And you'd have to go and explain ALL of those things, which in the end, they might take away the feeling intended for that part. But I'm not sure on this one .

 

Also, eh, to each their own. I've heard reasons why people turn anti-brony, but each one has their own thoughts. That's it, no need to prolong it longer (although, I AM intrigued if someone decides to do a question on to why people are or become anti-brony). It's better if you have an unbiased reason on the why, but if not, eh, I'm not bothering anyone nor going insane Twilight Sparkle on you/them . Besides, I look at the positive side of things. This just shows how REALL varied the community really is. As in, the one that likes the show. Bronies, anti-bronies, cloppers of whatever kind (innocent, guilty, perverted, normal, etc) thinkers, analyzers (or something like that ). While some of them might not be the best to have, they will always be there. Accept the community for all of it's faces, and we can become the best community ever. Regulate where it needs be, and that's it. Nothing else should be said. I still think we are one of the best communities out there. I'm betting to believe it won't go downwards from here . Also, sorry for that long rant. I normally like to speak my mind sometimes .

Edited September 18, 2012 by Arcanel

[PonyEcho 1,610]

 

 

on a MLD point, i like to the story but only when i give it a re-read and go into depth with it and i was one of the first Brony related things i got into a big discussion about back around October.

 

on a anti-brony point, it was a slow process from personal experiences also i have no problems with Bronies its more what it begining to stand for from the people who see it as a revolution and then try to measure there bronieness to other bronies to try to make them appear as the better brony, also the idea of 'true-bronie' pisses me off big time and that f king brony song represents everything that's wrong with and i'm gonna stop there because this is suppose to be a topic about MLP not why im not a bronie and now im to lazy to delete what iv'e already typed.

[ceresbane 61]

Last night I was touched by the fanfic, My Little Dashie. I won't lie I did cry, this fanfic was so good and it was also very sad. The story starts with a guy ( his name is not mentioned throughout the fanfic) walking down the street, he lives in a once very nice city but it was not so nice in the setting we find him in. While he is walking home he finds a box in the middle of the street he goes to the box and inside he finds a filly Rainbow Dash.He takes her with him and they go home. The guy has no idea how old Rainbow Dash is so he assumes that she is 5 years old. That is all I'm going to tell you if you want to know what happens read the fanfic My Little Dashie or go on YouTube and type in My Little Dashie read by Mic the Microphone rather way I'm sure you will leave with tears, but still it is a really good fanfic. If you have read this leave your thoughts in the comment section. Until next time I'm Brohoof117, stay 20% cooler MLP Forums.

 

where is the review?

 

well whatever it was a bit melodramatic and dragged on way too long and it repeated itself pointlessly quite alot. If it was abridged it would end up with so much more impact.

 

I'm guessing most of you actually never read the text but listened to mic.

 

without mic speaking you will see these weaknesses in writing. mic's reading distracts you from it.

Edited September 18, 2012 by ceresbane