Sneaky

The only significant thing I can think of is when I was on my computer late at night a few weeks ago. I felt something crawling on me, shined my computer screen light at my arm, and saw a fast little spider crawl off me and onto my bed. I started smacking it with my palm over and over, until it curled up into a ball and the last hit sent it flying off the bed. Not sure if it was really dead, but I was the victor in that fight. Especially since the last one I had ended up with my whole arm swelling up...

This isn't a word i can't pronounce, rather a word everyone else pronounces wrong. "crepe" is actually pronounced "crep," but americans like to say "crape." Which is fine, but the other day when I said 'crep' my dad corrected me with 'crape.' I got annoyed, but didn't say anything. *fluently

FINALLY another Coheed and Cambria fan! I was starting to think I was the only one Well, not literally, but you get the point.

Dunno if I've seen any classics yet, so I'm just gonna leave this here. Also, on a separate note, more metal. Coheed and Cambria, ladies and gents.

That's how you see your brother? XD Truthfully, I'd like to see how you pull this off. Normally, I'd think it would be hard to add content to a story centered around a recluse, but then again, Twilight Sparkle. Are you posting on fimfiction? Send me a link when you have the first chapter out, I'm curious.

Because Fluttershy is effing adorable is why. I mean, I'm only adding this part because of the character limit, but just look at that face. A small little cute smile and those big blue eyes. How could I resist?

*facepalm* Why do I assume that everyone on the internet is male? (Not counting the duck-human hybrids on Facebook) No, no, you're not coming off as an attention seeker. It's just that once you start writing a fic that gets attention, it can turn into a greed thing. (I want MOAR!!) And technically, you're not in the wrong forum. It's just that I've never found this place very useful when it comes to fic critique, or the like. This right here is one of the best advice threads I've ever seen. https://mlpchan.net/fic/res/3348.html#3348 I would suggest you go there noaw.

Nah, man, it wasn't you. I was referring to an "Oh dear baby Jesus. Not another human in Equestria fanfic." No names, since it's not good to single people out like that

You didn't say you were a new writer but I'm just going to assume you are because you're asking for help here. As much as people like to hate on HiE and pony OCs, I'd say you're on the right track. A few things I'd just like to point out are that, for one, you're planning on making a fanfic that's seven books long. Realistically speaking, neither you nor your audience will probably have the attention span required for that, so just compact it. Plots and arcs can be shortened into subplots and plots, making more happen in a shorter amount of time. Secondly, only one fuck can be given about your audience. I'm saying that when you feel it's right, listen to what your readers tell you, as they've obviously read what you have to write and can tell you some useful info, but don't constantly worry about what everyone's thinking. It'll make you too nervous to enjoy writing, thus reducing either the quality or quantity of your fic. Remember: you're writing for your own entertainment, with the audience being a bonus. Also, attention-whoring is bad. Attention whores are like wet dog crap; they stink, and because of this, are easy to find. Don't be an attention whore. Lastly, get a proofreader. I can guarantee that you're going to get writer's blindness, which will render you unable to see shittons of mistakes you make. A proofreader's second opinion will help you find these mistakes. And really, I'm kind of disappointed by any negative responses to this thread. You don't even give this guy a chance, and you're ragging on him already. Don't negate, offer advice in a positive or neutral way.

Hm... How about this. Having a house on a good plot of land, a forest perhaps on a mountainous terrain. Living off of the land, having maybe one or two dogs to live with, and enough money saved up to occasionally buy supplies, extra food, necessities, etc... Some good friends to hang out with, and I really don't care whether I have a girlfriend/wife or not. Oh, and you said no restrictions? A secret portal I have hidden somewhere in the middle of my forest that only I know about, that lets me cross back and forth between Equestria and Earth. I could bring some Earth inventions to Equestria to patent, so I'll have backup money in case I'm running low back on Earth. All extra bits I get from my wealth would be donated to worthy causes.

How about when there are two opposite-gender characters, and they always fall for each other in the end? That one annoys the heck out of me, most of the time. Otherwise, I'm willing it to happen the entire movie.

For me, if I don't consider someone attractive I find that sort of thing creepy. And I'm straight, so that kind of attention from a guy I'd definitely not enjoy.

1.) Cream Soda 2.) Strawberry Sunkist 3.) Root Beer Most of the other sodas, since I'm not a huge soda drinker, taste like they have too much sugar. Me no likey.

Oh that's cool. I like those people that are somehow forever helplessly linked. So, why don't you tell me how the two of you got stuck together. Or are you stuck? It's hard to tell through the computer screen.

I've got something... I don't like to admit it... It's really hard for me. And don't think badly of me, please. This is something I did years ago. I've changed. Believe me. I... I doubled-dipped... It was at the table, we were all having chips, Ruffles and Doritos to be exact. We were playing a board game, and being the foolish, immature child I was... I doubled dipped. I am so sorry... I have failed you all.

A little while back, I found that this name was commonly available on websites and not somehow taken up, so I use it a lot. If it is taken already, I call myself "SneakyFraise". Fraise is French for strawberry, and if you want to know, Sneaky Strawberry is just that much more preferable to Sneaky1.

Do you want to be added to the conversation about the creation of the show? You seem to be very resourceful, and if you're willing to help it would be great having you.

I remember in middle school being extremely insecure because of how people treated me. Whenever I could, if I found someone I could pick on, I would do it, and it made me feel on top of the world. Like I was in control. Then, I realized what I was doing was completely stupid. I decided to stop caring about what everyone else thought, joined sports, and found it completely ironic when suddenly all my oppressors wanted to be my friends a year later. Again, I got a satisfaction out of completely ignoring them, but realized that was stupid too, and so 'forgive and forget'.

This guy has some useful info, especially (for me) with the bios. It's a bit difficult for me right now to write with what I've been given so far.