Fanfiction Help

[Genepool 224]

I'm currently seeking assistance with a fan fic that I recently wrote. It’s been a little over a year since I started writing, so my skills have improved from what they were some time ago. However, they aren't exactly superlative compared to the other great writers in the fandom. Want to use this story to help me understand where i'm wrong, and apply that knoweldge to a story i've had in the works for that year i've been writing. (Mostly been flushing out the character, setting, story idea, places he visits, interactions, and such.)

 

Have, or hopefully have, a basic level of understanding when it comes to grammar. The finer points of grammar seem to elude like proper comma usage and "proper" punctuation.

 

Thank you for any advice, assistance, ideas, opinions, etc... , to help me improve my abilities.

 

Experiment

[Rainbow Skywalker 642]

My dad is an english professor, so I will try to run this by him, and myself. I will correct as much as possible and send you a .txt file of the story when Im done. Its a really cool story by the way.