critique wanted second opinion pleaseee :)

[Retil213 15]

soooooo heres a drawing i made as i was in school and we had some free time. it shows no one special just a picture i had in mind^^. i asked some classmates how they find it but they werent very interested so i ask you all for a second opinion^^

 

good or complete shit?

[Harmonic Revelations 8,835]

Pretty good, you have the proportions right, something that, in all truth, is extremely hard to do, especially when doing it offhand. I'd say you have some great talent.

[MelancholicMemory 2,025]

It's good, but there are a couple things you could do to improve it a lot First, the lower body is too small compared with the upper body. Secondly, the neck is too long. The exact shape of the chest area is also a little off, and you could add more detail to the shirt to get a more finished look to the drawing as a whole. The top of the hair may be a bit too high as well. That sounds like a lot of issues, but really, I think you did a good job.

Edited January 29, 2013 by MelancholicMemory

[Retil213 15]

It's good, but there are a couple things you could do to improve it a lot First, the lower body is too small compared with the upper body. Secondly, the neck is too long. The exact shape of the chest area is also a little off, and you could add more detail to the shirt to get a more finished look to the drawing as a whole. The top of the hair may be a bit too high as well. That sounds like a lot of issues, but really, I think you did a good job.

yes i give you right i noticed the thing with the neck too and that with the hair but at this point i already finished it and i was to lazy to erase the whole head again XD i was also thinking about the shirt but i simply had no idea how i could make it more detailed especially a blank one^^ i was never good at cloathing my drawings actually this is the first time i drew detailed pants lol what i dont see is the point with the lower body may it seems to small because there is a bit missing and the legs were supposed to stand infront of each other... anyway thanks for your comment,opinion and your tips