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I know I don't NEED to but I do because I can. Anyway, thanks for the feedback l, it helps allot. I know I do need to work on my fanfic writing skills so the feedback will help so if you would read chapter two when it comes out I'd really appreciate reading more of what I need to work on.

Soaring beauty. After a long day, Dinky Doo was walking home from her personal teacher, Twilight Sparkle's home, the old tree library. On her way home she saw a sight to behold, it was Scootaloo flying. She had never seen the light brilliant gamboge Pegasus fly before. "Wow! You're doing a great job!" She exclaimed to the gracefully flying Pegasus which landed and looked at her with a smile "Hey Dinky! Thanks, Rainbow did a great job teaching me how." "She sure did! How long have you been able to fly?" "About a month, I can't believe how much progress I made! And it's all because of Rainbow Dash!" "You fly so gracefully! I'm surprised you do considering Rainbow was teaching you." The moderate cerise maned Pegasus nodded at the pale, light grayish violate unicorn "Yeah, I've been focussing less on speed and more on maneuverability, I guess the gracefulness came with." "Sometimes I wish I were a Pegasus, but then I couldn't do this!" Dinky used her magic to levitate a flower up to Scootaloo. "This is for a job well done!" Scootaloo takes the flower and tucks it under her wing "Thanks Dinky! You really are getting better at magic! Do you know any other tricks?" "No, that's my only trick. Sorry" The unicorn's ears flatten against her head "Oh no Dinky, it's quite alright, you don't have to be sorry. Who is your teacher anyway? If you have one that is" Her ears perked up "It's princess Twilight! She is a great teacher!" "Wow, I didn't know you were getting lessons from Twilight, I guess we're both lucky to have the best of the best teach us!" "Yeah! Well I gotta go home... See you tomorrow?" "See ya Dinks" The light brilliant gamboge Pegasus took to the skies with grace as the light, grayish violate unicorn watched in awe "Wow..." She said to herself than she shook her head and snapped back into reality as she starts to trot home once again Authors note: hey guys this is chapter one of a new fanfic I'm making and I'd like to know if I'm doing a good job or not. And I'm also taking requests for shipping two characters together so if you want to the two characters be together than please contact me and I'll do the best I can. Stay awesome everypony!

Yes I am still taking requests however I most likely will not do another one that rymes because I will need to do extra thinking and that'll cause me to take allot longer And thinks for your input on this, it really helps. Feel free to read another work I did that I will most likely continue, it's an adventure/ romance and it's called "My Little Hell Hole: In Scootaloo's Eyes"

My Little Hell Hole: In Scootaloo's Eyes I was walking doing what I usually do nowadays; gathering materiel that could help us after the incident. But then while I was digging through the rubble of the broken down houses in the remains of Ponyville when I heard a voice I hadn't heard in about ten years so I didn't recognize it at first "Excuse me, what happened to Ponyville?" The voice of a pony asked, then I looked at the source of the voice with a serious look until I saw who it was "R-Rainbow Dash? Is that you?" The cyan colored Pegasus stood heroically in front of me "The one and only. May I ask wh-" she got cut off I hugged her tightly and then I said "I'm so glad you're back Rainbow, but how? And... How do you look like you did ten years ago?" The rainbow maned Pegasus got a confused look and asked "Who are you? And what do you mean by "back" and that I look like I did ten years ago? And what happened to Ponyville?" I stopped hugging her and looked at her as I said "It's me, Scootaloo, and you died yesterday so... In my eyes you're back. And you look like you did from ten years ago, it's as simple as that. As for what happened to Ponyville I'll tell you after we get beck to camp." Rainbow Dash says "This doesn't make any sense, I was just doing weather watch duty and fell asleep on a cloud, I just woke up in this place under some rubble from a house..." I thought for a second then said "Well I bet Twilight can find out what happened that brought you here but it's kinda late so she is most likely asleep... Anyway, the camp is just past that wall of rocks, just fly over there and go in the tent with the light still on, that tent is mine." "Alright Scoots, I guess I'll see you there... But I still have so many questions to ask" "I understand Dash but I need to do a couple of things first and tomorrow will be a busy day for you too, just go to my tent, yours has been taken down and you'll get it back at the end of the week, okay Dashie?" Rainbow Dash sighed "Alright Scoots, I'll see you at the camp I guess..." Dash sounded a little depressed there, I thought she didn't like the idea of sharing a tent with me, I continued the search for useful items while keeping a sharp lookout for ponies who might be out even though it's four 'til out curfew which is 11:30 P.M., I found nothing for three minutes so I went back to the camp and in my tent to find Rainbow Dash reading my diary, blood rushed to my face of what she could be reading and with anger "Rainbow Dash! Put my diary down this instant!" She jumped at the sound of my voice and put the brown book with a torn, leather cover and says diary in faded lettering on the front "I'm sorry Scoots, I-I didn't read anything too bad. I promise." "Then tell me what you in there right now." So she said "I read..." She shows me the page "this." She shows me a page on ot that says "this is it, I'm going to tell her how I feel, but how? We're in a time of need and she's so much older than me... I feel that I should wait bit it'll be too late any second now, she's getting worse and worse each minute... I guess that I'm at a stand still..." I closes the book and put it in my saddlebag "alright Dash, I'm not mad, but be more considerate about ponies feelings next time, you could've read something very personal... Like it's not already" "Sorry again Scoots..." Rainbow said with an apologetic tone "It's ok Dash, just don't do it again to anypony, not just myself" "Okay... What do you feel for this mystery pony and who is she anyway?" "I don't want to talk about it right now... Just... Get some sleep, Dash" "Alright... Goodnight Scoots" I turned the lantern off and let Rainbow Dash have the blanket, I thought to myself "Thank Celestia that she didn't find out I love her in a special way, but now I will have a chance with her after this crisis has been resolved" and then I fall asleep. Authors note: hey guys, I'm trying my best at a new MLP fanfic and I would like some input on this first chapter and if you'd like more, I'll read allot of the comments and see if I should continue it, and of you want to do something with the story then please consult me first and stay awesome!

I think the song might sound good in a game if it were longer, but as it stands it seems a bit short for my liking, but it does sound good

This is a good song and all but there are quite a few parts where the singer becomes off-beat, and if you took all the lyrics out it would just sound like a poorly made MK song for Rainbow Road, but all and all it's a good song.

The rhyme of affection 'Twas nearing night Twilight was in for a fright she was in bed for not one, not two, but three hours reading couldn't find out what she's feeling one pony ran through her head lLke like a knife through a piece of thread she didn't know why maybe the thought of romance has gotten to the point it's hard to continue to try she needed to confront the one she loved Without feeling like she's going to be shoved She couldn't help but think Is this what is really making her feel like she'd shriek? No, that can't be it Her love couldn't make her feel so desperate She was interrupted from her thoughts 'twas a knock on the bedroom door, alas, it was Rainbow Dash, the one she sought the one that was always and forever burned into her thoughts her love burned for Rainbow more than the sun could light, her only instinct was to say "hi Rainbow Dash, what's up?" She replied with haste "I need your help, I feel corrupt!" "What? Why do you say?" Twilight said trying not to look grey "I've fallen for one who I mustn't say Fluttershy Rarity nor Applejack could save me today Pinkie is away partying over in Manehattan so I couldn't go to her it's bothering me so much I think my vision is starting to blur!" Rainbow said loudly without being too hasty "maybe it'd help if you could tell me who you love, keeping it a secret can feel like a plastic cover, suffocating you until it explodes out before you, perhaps it could help us too" Dash stared in confusion "wait... You said "us"... Does that mean you feel the same?" Dash said as a blush spreads on their faces but who could blame? "Uh... What? You like me like how I'd never had the courage to tell thee? I'm glad as you probably can see" Twilight says with a greater blush But a smile like a filly getting with her first crush "well... Yeah, you're great! And I feel like I had a thing lifted off me, a weight it feels like it must be!" Rainbow said trying to not blush too much in front of the love of her life "so... What do you say for a date tonight?" Twilight says "I'd love to! But I'm low on bits to pay.." Dash said with a saddened face "oh, no worries! We're only two ponies! How expensive could something be? Let's go so we can have such a great time and may see! And maybe kiss before you go home" Twilight said while both still blush prone they went out and had a great time without Twilight being sucked dry. Authors note: well, hope you enjoyed, sorry that it was short but it was my first and I was running out of rhyming words, if anyone enjoyed it and wants another, name two ponies and I'll attempt to ship them together.