My First Fanfic

[Shadow_Foot 0]

my fanfic which has been up on fimfiction.net for a couple days now. I would love some constructive criticisms or ideas, either through here or on the site itself.not getting much results from there, so i figured I would put it up here to try and reach a broader audience. pardon if this sounds like a shamless plug. here's the link

 

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/15663/Shadow-Foot%27s-Great-Exploration