critique wanted Harmony Magic Analysis

[Partialgeek514 5,011]

So I made another video, and I'm wondering if anyone has any tips for my voice work. Also, thanks for the feedback on my other videos!

 

[Riganthor 484]

well I can hear you don't have a particalary amazing microphone but it does the job. Now what I did notice is that one this is a well written analysis though some jokes might liven it up a bit. Also you talk about the tree of harmony but don't mention that darkness is part of harmony. You need both sides, good and evil, to get perfect harmony.