writing Suggestions/Opinions on Warrior Cat RP Map?

[cookiequester 32]

Hey guys! It's been a while since I was last on here but I decided to get some suggestions and opinions on my Warrior Cat RP site's map description (since the map is not done yet.)

 

Here goes:

 

         The map consists of 4 major territories; SparrowClan to the upper left, DoveClan to the upper right, RavenClan to the lower left, and OwlClan to the lower right. A river snakes it's way down through DoveClan territory from a cliff at the outer edge. The water that cascades down forms a small pool at the bottom of a waterfall. Behind the waterfall is a small cave, but I'll get to that later. The river, after bottoming into the pool, sneaks down DoveClan until it touches the border between DoveClan and OwlClan territory. from then on it follows the border until it branches out into two paths near the middle of the territories. It forms a border between RavenClan and SparrowClan, as well as RavenClan and OwlClan. The path between RavenClan and SparrowClan climbs it's way north around the outer edge of SparrowClan territory and stops to form a large pond.

         On the other side of the border, the land slopes upward into a flat plateau-like expanse with twoleg houses covering it's area. At the bottom of the slope, on either side of the river there is thick vegetation: Juniper bushes, brambles, and many other other types of plants, many good as medicinal herbs. DoveClan, the territory with it's land sliced in two by the river, is formed of open moor, with rolling hills and lush, although somewhat sparse, vegetation. Trees clump together around the hill sides where they meet the river, forming a small clearing between. On one side of the river within the clearing is where the camp resides, sheltered from the wind by the hills and trees. Another smaller clearing resides a little ways away, nestled between the hills, unsheltered by the trees that surround the camp. This is the training hollow. The trees from OwlClan also come up around DoveClan territory, snaking their way behind the expanse of hills.

       OwlClan's territory is primarily medium-height pine trees. dense with underbrush and pine needles. Few deciduous trees grow in the thick woodland area. The woods open up to clearing surround by thick brambles, guarding all around the space. A large, hollow tree that had fallen many years ago lays under some of the brambles, offering an entrance into the large camp that OwlClan calls home. Not far from this clearing is another, smaller clearing. This one isn't surrounded by brambles and instead is just offered by the absence of trees. This is where OwlClan's apprentices train to become warriors. OwlClan doesn't have much medicinal herbs growing within it's pines but past the line of trees where they break away to make room for the river is a clearing where herbs that need lots of sunlight and water grow particularly well.

         Near where the river stretches between OwlClan and RavenClan is where the Pine trees thin out and mingle into deciduous trees, creating a mixed forest for RavenClan to call home. The trees are less dense here, but still close enough to provide protection from the rain and wind. The sky can be viewed through the branches and leaves of the trees overhead, unlike the thickly wooded areas of OwlClan where the trees provide a sort of roof. Brambles also grow thickly here, with more lush vegetation to hide among and patches of herbs growing across the territory where sunlight lays in swatches. A clearing makes its way into the trees, a taller oak reaching into the sky within the space. Around the tree is where RavenClan makes its camp, among the sprawling roots and trees ringing the clearing to make dens for themselves. Smaller and less guarded is near the edge of the territory, a spot surrounded in vegetation and brambles. This is the training hollow. At the Southern edge of the territory from RavenClan to OwlClan is a large twoleg area. the river stretches through it.

          Last but not least, SparrowClan. This Clan is also populated by trees. Oaks, Birches, Beeches, and Ashes cover the vast majority of the ground. Not many brambles dot the landscape, but berry bushes and flowers are not a rare sight in Newleaf and Greenleaf. There is quite a bit of space between trees, but it is still partially sheltered from the sky. Near the center of the territory is a hollow, where the ground dips down. Rocks that stick up from the earth, covered in moss, mark the camp between the trees. Nearby another hollow is carved into the ground, being the place where the apprentices train.

       The cave that rests behind DoveClan territory behind the waterfall is the Mooncave, where Medicine Cat go to speak to StarClan. Spikes of rock dip from the ceiling and reach from the floor, dispersing to show a deep pool where the moonlight reaches from the entrance. It seems to glow. From the area where the river splits is an area untouched by markings of territory. This area belongs to all of the Clans, where meetings are held under the full moon. The corners of each Clan dip down here, surrounded by flowers, herbs, brambles, and small trees.

 

I hope you guys enjoyed reading this just as much as I enjoyed writing it. xD Tell me if anything should be changed or added, and please tell me how you like or dislike it. <3 Thank you all!

Edited March 17, 2016 by cookiequester