Poetry of Equestria

[The Temporal Twins 89]

We made this topic as a single Repository for all you poets out there and for all of you who are, like me, trying to better your art form.

Please try to post what your inspirations or concerns are or where for your poem.

 

We'll go first...

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We came up with this poem as a youtube post for this video

 

 

While we listened to this song, we were inspired to write this poem and here it is...

 

Whether Derpy Hooves or Ditzy Doo, every step brings something new...

You bubbly mare of the pegasi, how we love to see you fly...

Flying, flying ever so high, letting your wing tips graze the sky...

And from the ground, we watch you soar, our hearts yearning to join you, evermore...

But from the kindness, of your heart, from the sky, you then part...

And as your hooves touch the ground, our hearts, once again, feel safe and sound.

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This poem was also a Youtube post, but for this video

 

 

It wasn't as much the video that brought along this poem, as it was the bronies who calmly repelled all the hate posts that surfaced until all the haters had left.

They were the ones who inspired this poem.

 

Haters will hate, Lovers will love...

Bronies united, fit like a glove...

For the Knight of good, to fight his fight...

To make the haters, all take flight...

On their wings of rage, away they flee...

Never looking, at you or me...

On our wings of love, so high we'll fly...

We'll look down at them, from the sky...

And as they hang their heads, ever so low...

We'll show them the love, that all bronies know...

We'll show them the path, to find their mark...

And watch as their friendship, makes "The Spark"...

 

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Constructive criticism is always welcome

If we don't know what we did wrong, we can't fix it

So please help us out but letting us know what you think of our poetry

Edited October 21, 2012 by Temporal Twins

[JeanHover 326]

ERNG

 

Elegant an beautiful. I like your style. You should write more of this, it's very well done.

 

...There's not much more I can say about this, I mean... I like it...

[The Temporal Twins 89]

Glad you liked them...

I'm surprised that I got them so good on my first try.

These are actually the first poems I've ever written by myself.

Now, i know this post is straying from the usual format of my posts in that I'm saying I instead of We, but this post is specifically from me, the younger of the twins. me and my sister usually post together and so we write "we"

But, in this occasion, it would happen that this is only from me...

[Ferret Girl 2,642]

Uhh... They were good, but they would be so much better if they didnt rhyme.

 

When I read them, I can see the point you are trying to get across, but it feels like the words you chose were more for the sake of rhyming than actually writing something deep.

[The Temporal Twins 89]

Uhh... They were good, but they would be so much better if they didnt rhyme.

 

When I read them, I can see the point you are trying to get across, but it feels like the words you chose were more for the sake of rhyming than actually writing something deep.

 

I'm sorry to hear that, but believe it or not, i don't really have a point when i write these...

I just write whatever i feel in my heart and curve it around the flow of the piece.

On the subject of rhyming, i find that rhyming poetry tends to have a stronger impact on those who read or hear it.

I'm sorry if you don't agree but that is the way i see it, and what i believe.

 

**Hugs you** There is your "I'm sorry hug"

**Hugs you again** And there is your "Friend Hug"

[Ferret Girl 2,642]

I'm sorry to hear that, but believe it or not, i don't really have a point when i write these...

I just write whatever i feel in my heart and curve it around the flow of the piece.

On the subject of rhyming, i find that rhyming poetry tends to have a stronger impact on those who read or hear it.

I'm sorry if you don't agree but that is the way i see it, and what i believe.

 

**Hugs you** There is your "I'm sorry hug"

**Hugs you again** And there is your "Friend Hug"

 

oh don't think I am trying to jusge you or chastise you for rhyming. Everyone writes in a unique way, and many choose to rhyme. Simply stating my opinion on it however. As for when i said "point", I was reffereing to the over all theme that makes itself present through the use of your words.

 

In that respect, yes, even if you did not realize it, you gave your poems a point.

 

Please, continue writing. If you wish, you could view my poetry to see what I mean by using language in ways other than rhyming.

[The Temporal Twins 89]

oh don't think I am trying to jusge you or chastise you for rhyming. Everyone writes in a unique way, and many choose to rhyme. Simply stating my opinion on it however. As for when i said "point", I was reffereing to the over all theme that makes itself present through the use of your words.

 

In that respect, yes, even if you did not realize it, you gave your poems a point.

 

Please, continue writing. If you wish, you could view my poetry to see what I mean by using language in ways other than rhyming.

 

Thanks again for your input

I hope to hear from you some more as time goes on

I think I'll take you up on your offer and take a look

[Ferret Girl 2,642]

Thanks again for your input

I hope to hear from you some more as time goes on

I think I'll take you up on your offer and take a look

 

=)

Yes, I look forward to seeing more from you

If you do wish to see mine though, the links are in my signature.

 

The first one is filled with many random poems.

the second and third are a bit more emotional.

[The Temporal Twins 89]

Once again everypony,

You guys can post your material here too.

We'd love to see what everypony else can come up with and give constructive criticism on it...

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I came up with this poem for Comrade-Dimitri-Hammer as a caption for his Avatar.

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Through the brightest day, and the blackest night

my love for you, is the brightest light

 

I'm here as your guard, so evil beware

I'm here cause I love you, my beautiful mare

 

To protect you from harm, I'll lay down my life

I'd willingly die, at the tip of a knife

 

And if before my time, I should die

I beg of you, please don't cry

 

For if I find myself, before Heaven's gate

I'll tell Saint Peter, I have to wait

 

Cause one of these days, we'll reunite

and on the wings of our love, we shall take flight

 

Together we'll fly, of one heart

and never again, will death do us part.

 

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Due to a lack of activity I will not be updating this topic anymore...

If you would like to see more of my work you can find it on HERE.

I may or may not be posting each piece as a separate topic in the "Other Fan Works" section of "Octavia's Hall"

 

Thank You those of you who did post

I hope to hear from the two of you again sometime

Edited October 29, 2012 by The Temporal Twins