Reviewing Anything Creative

[SoarinBlue 202]

Do you want something reviewed?  Anything pony at all?  I'll provide a review for anything creative that you'd like in this thread.  OCs, art/drawings, videos, fanfics, anything you'd like.  At the risk of sounding arrogant, I am good at this, and I like doing what I can to improve the quality of creative works within the fandom.  Be aware though that I am very blunt and also have high standards.  If something is bad, I'm going to tell you that it's bad.  But I will also tell you what you can do to fix it (if it can be saved), and from there, the choice is yours.

 

So without further rambling, let's get started

[Tropical Jubilee 5]

Perhaps review my OC, Tropical Jubilee? His cutie mark is two crossed palm trees to represent his relaxed nature and his protectiveness of his jungle home. I would have added it in, but GraphicsGale is a jerk....

Edited June 23, 2013 by Tropical Jubilee

[Level3rd 128]

Ok, here, why not?  A track that I put together for the 5th level of the school I'm attending at the moment.

This track didn't take as long to make as some of my other tracks, which bugs me sometimes, but you can't relate production time to quality.  Curious to see what you think.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W3SGS5b48jA

[SoarinBlue 202]

Perhaps review my OC, Tropical Jubilee? His cutie mark is two crossed palm trees to represent his relaxed nature and his protectiveness of his jungle home. I would have added it in, but GraphicsGale is a jerk....

That color scheme is raping my eyes.  The neon green is hard on the eyes by itself, but it also clashes violently with the fuchsia mane and tail.  Tone it way down on the colors, they should be subtler and easy on the eyes, to be attractive but not distracting.

 

The general shape of the drawing is fine, it's a pretty well done pony, but it's really low quality at the edges.  The areas where the mane/tail and body are bordering each other are especially bad, those really need a touchup, because they look kind of sloppy

 

Personally, I'm not a fan of the facial hair.  I find it distracting from the rest of the character.  That's more a matter of taste though

 

Given that his cutie mark is two palm trees (which seems fine), what is his special talent that relates to those?  Try to come up with and emphasize something more concrete than it representing that he lives in the jungle

[Tropical Jubilee 5]

That color scheme is raping my eyes.  The neon green is hard on the eyes by itself, but it also clashes violently with the fuchsia mane and tail.  Tone it way down on the colors, they should be subtler and easy on the eyes, to be attractive but not distracting.

 

The general shape of the drawing is fine, it's a pretty well done pony, but it's really low quality at the edges.  The areas where the mane/tail and body are bordering each other are especially bad, those really need a touchup, because they look kind of sloppy

 

Personally, I'm not a fan of the facial hair.  I find it distracting from the rest of the character.  That's more a matter of taste though

 

Given that his cutie mark is two palm trees (which seems fine), what is his special talent that relates to those?  Try to come up with and emphasize something more concrete than it representing that he lives in the jungle

Well, I admire your honesty, friend. I used a base for two drawings, and the other was a quickie. I can say, you're the most honest person I've asked about him. I suppose the colors are a bit eye rapey...

[SoarinBlue 202]

Ok, here, why not?  A track that I put together for the 5th level of the school I'm attending at the moment.

 

This track didn't take as long to make as some of my other tracks, which bugs me sometimes, but you can't relate production time to quality.  Curious to see what you think.

 

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=W3SGS5b48jA

Well, I meant for this to be more fandom related stuff.  However, I did end up listening to about half.  I'm not a musician so take this with a grain of salt, but I thought it was pretty good.  It sounded like you were going for a really maximalist approach, but some of the synths sounded faded and part of the background, I'd be curious to see how it sounds if you made them a bit more prominent

Well, I admire your honesty, friend. I used a base for two drawings, and the other was a quickie. I can say, you're the most honest person I've asked about him. I suppose the colors are a bit eye rapey...

You're not alone at least.  Loud, clashing colors are not an uncommon thing among OCs.  I can see that you're trying to give him more of a tropical look, so the green/fuchsia combination can work that way, but less neon would be a significant improvement 

[Tropical Jubilee 5]

Well, I meant for this to be more fandom related stuff.  However, I did end up listening to about half.  I'm not a musician so take this with a grain of salt, but I thought it was pretty good.  It sounded like you were going for a really maximalist approach, but some of the synths sounded faded and part of the background, I'd be curious to see how it sounds if you made them a bit more prominent

You're not alone at least.  Loud, clashing colors are not an uncommon thing among OCs.  I can see that you're trying to give him more of a tropical look, so the green/fuchsia combination can work that way, but less neon would be a significant improvement 

Well, I took your advice and tried something that isn't so, "Mother of Celestia, my fucking eyes are bleeding." I never intended it to look that bright, but I guess I never noticed it until now. Better, less rapey?

Edited June 23, 2013 by Tropical Jubilee

[SoarinBlue 202]

Well, I took your advice and tried something that isn't so, "Mother of Celestia, my fucking eyes are bleeding." I never intended it to look that bright, but I guess I never noticed it until now. Better, less rapey?

Hmmm, I'm not really feeling the tan, it throws off the tropical motif.  I don't think the problem was the green/red, just the shades you were using.  Try using a darker green and a more subtle shade of red.  Almost watermelon-y.  Something like the attached color scheme I just threw together in Pony Creator (ignore eye color and such).  You could maybe even go a little bit darker on the coat color than I did

[Dusty Soul 2,611]

Well here's a fandom related songhttp://soundcloud.com/dakota-schilling-1/fire-in-my-mind-re-recorded

Here's one that isn't

http://soundcloud.com/dakota-schilling-1/someone-id-love-to-meet (recording is supposed to sound low quality)

I know this is for fandom related stuff, but I'd like critique on it.

[Chigens and Kay 3,832]

Tell Kaynah what you think of her. This could prove to be very interesting. Mind you, she has no backstory really. Just review her overall design.

 

 

 

Her cutie mark on her scales represents her skill with a spear (her weapon of choice).

This is what she originated as:

 

 

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This is what she has become since her birth:

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I know there are a few inconsistencies, but I think it's cool to let the artist stylize their own work. You can see her general design though.

 

 

[Orablanco Account 3,707]

Eh, why not?

 

 

 

 

I know that it isn't really the same style as the show, but that's not what I wanted anyhow.

 

Also, sorry for the image being so gosh darned big.

 

[SoarinBlue 202]

 

 

Well here's a fandom related songhttp://soundcloud.co...ind-re-recorded

Vocals are a bit inconsistent, sometimes they sound great, sometimes they sound like you're trying to work outside your range and end up sounding like your voice is cracking (could be nerves during recording too?  Not totally sure).  Some of the lyrics are a bit strained as well.  They aren't awful, but could use some fine tuning.  I like the guitar.  Something seems off about the drum track though, I can't quite put my finger on it.  I'll try coming back to it later with fresh ears and seeing if I can give you a better answer on that

 

 

Tell Kaynah what you think of her. This could prove to be very interesting. Mind you, she has no backstory really. Just review her overall design.

Okay, so this is going to be more a matter of taste.  I don't particularly like hybrid OCs like this, they really embody one of the things that hurts OCs the most, and that would be SSSS (super special snowflake syndrome, for those that aren't familiar).  Well made OCs can fit seamlessly into the show universe and exist there without being distracting.  A pony-serpent hybrid is about the opposite of that.  Additionally, her name is way outside the general naming conventions of the show universe, and her special talent seems to be killing things with a spear, which is also something you would never see in Equestria.

 

That aside, the coloring seems fine, the body pattern, while something I would normally criticize, fits thematically, so I have no problem with that.  Most of the art looks fine to me, although in some of them it looks like she's a normal pony that's had her lower half swallowed by a giant fish without eyes.  Also, not a criticism, but a random observation, she looks like an evil half-serpent Sweetie Belle in the bottom two

Eh, why not?

 

 

 

 

 

I know that it isn't really the same style as the show, but that's not what I wanted anyhow.

 

Also, sorry for the image being so gosh darned big.

I'm assuming this is RD's dad?  His wing looks angular and unnatural, ear is too pointy and small, and his body is disproportionately large compared to the rest of him (particularly in the chest and neck area).  The rest I'm assuming is stylistic difference

[Chigens and Kay 3,832]

Okay, so this is going to be more a matter of taste.  I don't particularly like hybrid OCs like this, they really embody one of the things that hurts OCs the most, and that would be SSSS (super special snowflake syndrome, for those that aren't familiar).  Well made OCs can fit seamlessly into the show universe and exist there without being distracting.  A pony-serpent hybrid is about the opposite of that.  Additionally, her name is way outside the general naming conventions of the show universe, and her special talent seems to be killing things with a spear, which is also something you would never see in Equestria.

 

That aside, the coloring seems fine, the body pattern, while something I would normally criticize, fits thematically, so I have no problem with that.  Most of the art looks fine to me, although in some of them it looks like she's a normal pony that's had her lower half swallowed by a giant fish without eyes.  Also, not a criticism, but a random observation, she looks like an evil half-serpent Sweetie Belle in the bottom two

 

I never intended to use her in Roleplays or anything of the sort. I only asked that you rate her overall design, not how she would fit into Equestria...because I don't care about any of that.

 

To clear some things up with this: "Additionally, her name is way outside the general naming conventions of the show universe, and her special talent seems to be killing things with a spear, which is also something you would never see in Equestria."

 

Her name was supposed to be like that. You don't see Gilda with a weird talent-influenced name, do you? About the spear thing, no she only kills things to eat like any other carnivore.

 

Besides that, I thank you for your review / opinion. Sorry if it sounded too hostile. I just wanted to clear some stuff up.

Edited June 23, 2013 by Chigens and Kay
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