dark Rainbow Dash Fanfic

[EP1C N3RD 45]

As recommended by some fellow bronies I will advertise my story I wrote. For right now it's just the prologue because I won't waste my time writing more chapters if no one likes it. Please give me you honest opinion. Well here it goes http://www.fanfiction.net/s/9454922/1/Eternal-Insomnia

[Proton 565]

The title is awesome.

Now, to the story.

I like your writing, however I found many grammar mistakes, and you must correct them if you want someone to ever like your fic.

Now, the plot. It seems interesting, and the disease RD suffers of really reminds me of Rocket to Insanity. Anyway, struck by lightning 3 times? What? xD.

Oh, and RD is a WonderBolt now. Yay, great future for her. (Excluding her disease

 

Overall, your writing is great, but you must correct the grammar mistakes. And also explain the "struck by lightning 3 times" part.

I can only tell you about these two suggestions:

1. When writing, think of your story as the best thing ever written

2. When editing, think of it as the WORST thing ever written

 

That is all.

 

Antidermis out.