My little pony : Friendship is magic [ Manga version ]

[Caramel-and-Cupcakes 12]

Hello everyone!

 

This is my first post and topic on this forum and I hope you will enjoy it. With the news of an upcoming Mlp manga, I decided to give it a shot myself. However, since I am much more experienced with drawing humans I have decided to re-draw the story we love with humanized characters. ( Horns and wings will be kept the way they are ) 

 

No text yet because I want to wait for a better quality version first. Unfortunately my scanner broke down so I can only use cellphone pictures now. However, I think we are all quite familiar with the story so there should be no problem understanding it.

 

If curious, I used regular fineliners and three greyscale copic markers ciao. ( C-3, C-5 and C-7 )

 

 

Any kind of feedback is hugely appreciated. This is my first time putting together a manga like this so feedback would be great! ; w ; I'm always looking forward to imroving my art.

 

 

[Silverwisp the Bard 2,353]

Well, I won't pretend that this isn't miles ahead of my level, but it seems a bit too Shojo to me:

The same-ish faces, the fact that Tia and Luna both look like they're thirteen, Luna wearing a miniskirt... doesn't really work for me.

 

Apart from that, I'd say make the outlines a bit thicker, they are in danger of being overwhelmed by the colours.

Oh and clouds tend to have a somewhat smooth underside.

[Caramel-and-Cupcakes 12]

Well, I won't pretend that this isn't miles ahead of my level, but it seems a bit too Shojo to me:

The same-ish faces, the fact that Tia and Luna both look like they're thirteen, Luna wearing a miniskirt... doesn't really work for me.

 

Apart from that, I'd say make the outlines a bit thicker, they are in danger of being overwhelmed by the colours.

Oh and clouds tend to have a somewhat smooth underside.

 

Thanks for your feedback! 

 

I'll try to improve on my faces for the mane six, just like the show gives them somewhat different eye types I'd like to do that too. The only one who will have those really big shoujo eyes will be Pinkie because that suits her in my opnion.

Shoujo's a style some people love and others don't, it's the style I've read since I was smaller and also drawn because it appeals to me. I can totally understand your point of view but changing my whole style at once seems a bit impossible but I will at least try to tone it down some more and make the characters look more mature.

[Silverwisp the Bard 2,353]

 

 

I will at least try to tone it down some more and make the characters look more mature.

No need to bend yourself over backwards because one person doesn't like Shoujo

Give me a holla when you've done the Mane Six, I'm curious how they'll turn out.

[Caramel-and-Cupcakes 12]

No need to bend yourself over backwards because one person doesn't like Shoujo

Give me a holla when you've done the Mane Six, I'm curious how they'll turn out.

 

Sure, I'll try to update this topic quite frequently. Page four is actually already done so I might upload that later today. As for the next character, that will be Nightmare moon ( though it's technically still Luna in another form ) I'll try my best to actually make her look like a villain and not all cutesy and sparkly.

 

Next page! My cellphone took a really crappy picture, I have no idea why it's so blue all of a sudden. Hopelly my scanner gets fixed soon because these pictures don't do my art any justice.

 

Anyway, I guess this page's okay. I like the expression of Celestia and Luna in the panel on the upper left. The darkness taking over her heart was portrayed by more of 'evil spirit' like creatures here because that's a personal headcanon of mine. The lock is just a symbolisation to go along with the chains on page three.