request Would anypony mind Looking at my new OC?

[Grand_Finale 529]

Sorry this is sorta annoying to some people, but I just want to see some opinions on her. She is Tarot in my link, I would really appreciate your feedback! Ihavent used her yet, so she still needs some character added to her, I know, but just how this rough first draft is would be nice!

[Winona the Dog 1,984]

She looks cool enough for an original character but you should consider drawing her on  paper or digital art. Then add anything to make her really special!

[Grand_Finale 529]

I would love to, but I am horrible at drawings, and would end up butchering her lol. I might get my sister to draw my OCs though, she is pretty darn talented when it comes to drawing

[Nomadic 210]

I don't mind, sorry in advance if I'm overly critical this my first time reviewing someone else OC.

 

Appearance: The colour scheme is nice. Nothing clashes with anything else, and is rather pleasant to the eyes.

 

Cutie Mark: Nice and simple. The only problem I have with it is that a Crystal Ball kinda falls into the realm of what exactly am I looking at, think of when Apple Bloom made a Loop-de-hoop cutie mark appear in The Cutie Pox, and no-one could figure out what it was. So overall it is nice, but really might need just something a little more easy to pick up what it is.

 

Personality: She really doesn't appear to have any negative attributes, which makes her seem rather bland. Though, you do have a good starting point you seem to want to make her a bit of an eccentric. Things I would also try to add are what do her friends act like around her, how does she act when not around others, due to her ability how does she react around other ponies is she disgusted by them, admire or pity them, and possibly her likes and dislikes.

 

Backstory:  Seems nice enough for a first draft. I only see one major problem and that is should really go in to her greater detail about why she ran away other then she left because she wanted to follow her own path. Also if you want to there should be some personal experiences both from when she was both with her family and after to show how they affected her. It makes her sound rather self-centred as she leaving her family and society for her own personal gain.

 

Overall: As a starting point you seem to have a rather strong idea and grasp on where you want to go with her as you just need to flesh her out a little bit more, which you did say you were aware of the problem. Currently she seems rather bland, though I am greatly interested in where you take her character from here.

Edited August 2, 2013 by Nomadic

[Grand_Finale 529]

Thanks, I appreciate that! once i get to use her, It should launch itself, but I just sorta had an idea and threw it on here. I will be sure to add more to her