slice of life Fluttershy's Bad Day

[TheLuigiLightning 65]

Yeah, I made a fan fiction.  It's called Fluttershy's Bad day.  It's a slice of life story where Fluttershy goes through a really tough day.  That's all I'm going to say, because I don't want to spoil it.  I think it's completely overrated, because everyone on FIMFiction seems to like it for some reason.  I think it's terrible, but I can't speak for you guys.  Let's here your opinions.  Enjoy (I hope).

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/108470/fluttershys-bad-day

[repsol rave 2,963]

i actually allready read this one

it's very good in my honest opinion! you shouldn't look down on yourself like that, writing seems to be going quite well for you.

as stated in the comments on fimfiction, maybe you should get a proofreader. but that's all i got on this story.

its original, and that's rare for a fanfic.

[TheLuigiLightning 65]

i actually allready read this one

it's very good in my honest opinion! you shouldn't look down on yourself like that, writing seems to be going quite well for you.

as stated in the comments on fimfiction, maybe you should get a proofreader. but that's all i got on this story.

its original, and that's rare for a fanfic.

Oh, thank you!  I really appreciate your honest positive feedback.  I guess you really do need other people in order to make a fair rating about your work.

[Wingnut 6,994]

OK, that was a cute, short fanfiction. The only thing that struck me a bit odd is where the narrative says, "This is where everything goes downhill endlessly for the poor mare for the rest of the day." Perhaps a more subtle indication that things were turning for the worse would be the way to go. Otherwise, this story had a nice structure and flow. And I'm a huge Fluttershy fan, so I had no problem getting into it.

[VoxelBrony 65]

That was such a great story! all though, I couldn't tell if anypony was talking at some points because of no quotation marks. Again, no quotation marks were included at some points. But other than that, A really great fanfiction. Keep up the good work!