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I sat staring at my wall last night and my brain decided that it wanted to write the introduction to a fanfic... I let it. I just would like someone or some people  to pre-read the intro and tell me if I should continue the rest of the story. Some Pre-reader warning, the entire story is written in a way that makes it seem like it will fall into the gutter, but it is actually all just build up to a punch line/plot twist at the end or midway through. Mind you I came up with this idea past midnight, but I did edit it in the morning so that the grammar and spelling isn't horrifying.

 

Seriously though, I can't stress the fact that this is NOT a clop fic, it just...seems like one...yeah.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1P7AlZCj8gSoHcoGZxvVZfXUEL_7oHL0vm-j7BOJIBGI/edit

So did anyone actually read it? I'm just wondering cause I have gotten zero feedback/comments/insults and I really want to know whether or not I should continue this intro into a full story.

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Holy Celestia, I already laughed at the first dialouge and liked it. Though humor started to die out when I went further into the story but you can probably leave that out since it's a good start to start out a story. In my opinion, you should make it into a full story. Just don't get ahead of yourself mate

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Holy Celestia, I already laughed at the first dialouge and liked it. Though humor started to die out when I went further into the story but you can probably leave that out since it's a good start to start out a story. In my opinion, you should make it into a full story. Just don't get ahead of yourself mate

Yeah I notice the longer my story gets the less interesting it becomes...I probably should try and keep it as short and concise as possible.