Just Another Valentine's Day *First Fanfic* Looking for critiques/proofread

[Gone Airbourne 21,977]

So I began writing this fanfic a couple of days ago and I have never wrote one before... I had an idea for one come up and decided that I wanted to write this over the couple of days. 

 

It is a second person story with a bit of slice of life, romance, and a bit sad.  Main character is my OC and another character you'll find out

 

I was looking for someone to critique this if possible or even if someone could proof - read this I would greatly appreciate it. 

 

Thanks for taking the time to read this if you did

 

http://www.docdroid.net/7jra/just-another-valentines-day-2.pdf.html

Edited December 26, 2013 by Ticking Timebomb

[Scootalove 10,689]

I think it's a really well put together fan fiction even as a first attempt. Great job!

[Gone Airbourne 21,977]

I think it's a really well put together fan fiction even as a first attempt. Great job!

Thanks scootalove i am going to try and edit out to try and fix any word mistakes and the like.

[Champion RD92 8,658]

I WILL PROOFREAD!!!

 

Let me read it.

[Gone Airbourne 21,977]

I WILL PROOFREAD!!!

 

Let me read it.

Mostly all the words are spelled right I think when I transferred it to a pdf format it squished the words together making it look like some of the words were misspelled.