OC Traditional Sketch

[mars 4,862]

http://24.media.tumblr.com/73b3957292f17dda4e0b209c8a49dfdf/tumblr_n0lv86OE8H1rtbzaao1_1280.jpg

 

I can't post the actual photo here because I'm on mobile, but here's a link to where I posted it. I don't have a scanner, so I took a photo with my phone and used a photo editor to darken the lines.

 

Um, basically, I'm asking for critques and how I can improve.

Edited February 7, 2014 by Creativity

[True Rarity 1,240]

Hey, that's not bad at all. She's perhaps a bit tall, but that doesn't exactly matter. Other than that, it looks great! I love the dress!

[Cloicorn 39]

She looks gorgeous! I love he outfit and eloquent look she has!

 

As for improvements make sure the feet are on the right "planes(the same length). Right now the front leg is shorter then the back leg(legs closest to us). So you either need to make the front leg(closest to us) shorter or visa versa. From this view the other set of legs on her other side should be slightly shorter looking to emphasize distance(so you basically don't want all 4 legs the exact same length .

 

Other then that I'd also just reference horse anatomy at times if you get stuck. Her hoofs look like they could be a little more slanted out in the front.

 

I'm attaching a couple links to a real horse hoof and mlp characters. Focus on the length of their legs and shape of their hoofs .

 

http://images6.fanpop.com/image/photos/32100000/my-little-pony-friendship-is-magic-my-little-pony-friendship-is-magic-32105499-2560-1600.jpg

http://nokotahorse.files.wordpress.com/2012/04/2012-03-31-065.jpg

 

 

You have a really nice design right now !

Edited February 8, 2014 by Cloicorn

[mars 4,862]

Wow! Thank you both so much! I will definitely study more on the anatomy on the hooves.

[Silverwisp the Bard 2,353]

Well, Cloicorn already pointed out the hooves.

Well, the only other thing that springs to mind is that the tail sits a bit too low. Horsetails are an elongation of the spine and sit at an angle above the buttocks (roughly 45° upwards).

A minor thing would be to sightly expand the outline of the clothing beyond the outline of the body (unless you mean for the material to be very thin).

 

All that being said, it's a gorgeous design. Does she have a name?

[mars 4,862]

Well, Cloicorn already pointed out the hooves.

Well, the only other thing that springs to mind is that the tail sits a bit too low. Horsetails are an elongation of the spine and sit at an angle above the buttocks (roughly 45° upwards).

A minor thing would be to sightly expand the outline of the clothing beyond the outline of the body (unless you mean for the material to be very thin).

 

All that being said, it's a gorgeous design. Does she have a name?

Thank you so much! I never gave her a name. She was suppose to start off as a model pony, but I ended up turning her into some grecian design.

[nintonbp 24]

If you need help studying anatomy, here's a really good reference sheet. http://vertrev.deviantart.com/art/AMG-so-much-pony-201791308

[Cloicorn 39]

Well, Cloicorn already pointed out the hooves.

Well, the only other thing that springs to mind is that the tail sits a bit too low. Horsetails are an elongation of the spine and sit at an angle above the buttocks (roughly 45° upwards).

A minor thing would be to sightly expand the outline of the clothing beyond the outline of the body (unless you mean for the material to be very thin).

 

All that being said, it's a gorgeous design. Does she have a name?

Silverwisp makes a good point about the tail, however I believe it's ok if the tail is high in mlp designs sometimes(example pinky pie, haha). I would be sure that it feels like there's some kind of connection between the tail and body if it is high. draw a few hair strands from the base of the tail to the tip to show curvature of the tail and emphasize the 'root' of the tail(good example would to be look at mlp ponie's tails from the show. how they have a few hair lines within the tail design. This also keep the design from looking to flat

 

It's hard to find a good middle ground between realism and cartoon design sometimes