DarkenedPath

just a brief analysis of what the story is about, like the things you read on the back of a book cover, it briefly goes over the plot and identifies the main characters.

if you need more pre-readers, the best thing to do is just outright ask, give a basic premise and then ask if anyone wants to pre-read it, that's what i do anyway.

oh, okay then, never mind me.

well, as I've said before, it's not bad but you could use an editor to fix a few of those little mistakes that keep throwing it off for me. hope to see more soon, and i also hope you can find someone to edit the chapters too. (I can do it if you want, i'm always happy to help someone out, especially if they're trying to write.)

i don't see why not Xbox: FlutterRage Steam: DarkenedPath

most certainly interesting, i wouldn't mind seeing more of these.

this isn't bad, it gave me something to kill a few minutes with and it was actually fairly well written, i see a few minor problems but nothing distracting, that's my inner grammar nazi pointing that out, all in all, good work.

thank you both for the welcome.

loved the facial expressions there, made me laugh hard, i'm kinda worried that i might have woken my dad up though...

thanks for the heads up.

Hello everypony, I suppose i should introduce myself, my name is DarkenedPath (or Josh if you want) and this is just a brief intro i guess. just getting myself out into the forums and all that. well... i have absolutley nothing to say so... i'm off.