Read my OC's Sweetheart background please =3

[Jonquil Earthpony 168]

Sweetheart’s backstory
 
She is a half unicorn, half earth pony. Her mother lived in a village with other earth ponies harvesting crops. Her father was a unicorn whom was a well-established figure and knowledgeable librarian in a town of unicorns.
One day the two ponies met in the market place as items were exchanged. Their eyes meet across a crowd they couldn’t help but to take interest in each other, it was a sense that they knew each other already. They walked through the crowd and hid in the unicorns empty libabry.it was love they had seen in each other’s eyes that day; they wanted to live together forever. However their love was forbidden as they were an earth pony and a unicorn. The earth pony realised after a few months of being secretly together, that she was pregnant with a foal.
 
 
They didn’t know whether the foal was going to be a earth pony or unicorn so they moved to the outskirts of the earth pony village; so their unborn foal could be raised comfortable; when sweetheart was born it was discovered that she was a unicorn.
Sweetheart was named so as when she was a tiny foal she was always gentle and caring. She was given a plush pony as her new-born toy and she would cuddle it gently and would never drop it always making sure it was with her.
 
 
Being a unicorn she wasn’t allowed to go to the village, instead she would be out in her parent’s apple orchard playing and being with her father. He tried to teach her magic spell but Sweetheart had always found it more difficult. (Not typical of a unicorn of her age)

She would spend many days playing hide and seek with her father. She loved counting stars at night and running around. As Sweetheart got older she became a great apple-bucker however she magic was still delayed and was weak. She wanted to meet other ponies so badly but she knew how the earth ponies would react. She was half earth pony, half unicorn and others would be sickened by her.
 
One day however went she was a teenager; she left her home to see other ponies in the village. The earth ponies didn’t speak to her; a pony by the name of Rose Petals even said she was a freak of nature and a crowd corralled of angry earth ponies enclosed her. They were ashamed of her presence. “Go lived with your own kind”. “Why don’t you go and take your useless magic with you”. Sweetheart began crying unable to move until a flash of red light. It was her magic overpowering her; she began rampaging out of control.
 
Her mother saw her and tried to comfort her. It didn’t work. It wasn’t until she ran out of energy did she stop. She was carried home by her mother and father as she fell unconscious.
 
After the incident Sweetheart changed; she became angrier and impatient with others unless they proved them genuineness to her. She tried so hard to trust others again but she felt that ponies would always judge her if they found out her secret (her being half earth pony, half unicorn).
 
One day she sees Moonstar Cocoa in her orchard and she panics; Moonstar convinces Sweetheart to come with her and Dusty to a life where she can be herself and learn about the world as they find Dusty’s destiny and to build a new life where as races can life together in harmony.
 
 
Adventures begin soon…. 





also the story of how she got her cutie mark will be revealed soon ......

 

[Memory Lane 131]

Interesting. A Romeo and Juliet inspired origin? Pray tell, does this story transpire during the era before the founding of Equestria? Surely so, less this be an alternate dimension of sorts. Overall, I like Sweetheart and she has my sympathies. 

[Jonquil Earthpony 168]

you are 100% correct Keyclipse. the story does occur in an era before the founding of Equestria   

BTW here is a pic of Dusty and Moonstar Cocoa

[Memory Lane 131]

Fascinating. Moonstar Cocoa the Bat Pony of all species and Dusty Travels the Pegasus invite Sweetheart the Unicorn to join their adventuring party in search of self discovery and peace between all races. I must know if you turn this into a fanfiction someday.

[Jonquil Earthpony 168]

i will turn this into a fan fic one day, i'm just trying to work out all the characters and plot ideas before i start it. 

Any suggestions on how to write a good fan fiction? like thing to avoid doing and stuff like that  please and thank you 

[Memory Lane 131]

Oh, what could I say that isn't obvious? I'm sure you've read enough fanfiction to know what makes a story successful and well formatted.

I'm attracted to stories with an interesting concept or an interesting setting. I appreciate a story that takes it's time and provides you with plenty of details. I dislike forced dialog or events to move the story along.

[Jonquil Earthpony 168]

i would like it to be a long story with bits in the middle =)

[Memory Lane 131]

Having a grand overarching story with a series of side quest littered in between is a good idea. You can use each main character to tell a different portion of the story from their respective perspectives.

[Pat.Rio.T. 305]

Okay, that makes more sense,   knowing that this is before Equestria. But how did others, especially this "Rose Petal", know that she is half earth pony? Her parents wouldn't reveal that to anypony would they?

[Jonquil Earthpony 168]

Okay, that makes more sense,   knowing that this is before Equestria. But how did others, especially this "Rose Petal", know that she is half earth pony? Her parents wouldn't reveal that to anypony would they?

They saw that she was a unicorn and were hateful because of that. They told her to take her magic else where. In actuality she can't do magic very well at all unless she becomes emotional thanks for the question

[Jonquil Earthpony 168]

I am going to redo Sweetheart's hair =) I love the front spikey hair but i think the rest of the mane is too smooth ( needs a bit more spike), and the tail needs more spikiness =3 but i want to keep the bows =)