adventure A Mysterious Stranger in Ponyville (Please Feedback)

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[Officer Strike 152]

Wow that is so awesome man!

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[Burning Dusk 46]

I like what you have done with this fanfic. It shows the perspectives of the pony and human i think XD.

[Burning Dusk 46]

I liked the break of the forth wall here. It shows different perspectives of the show and the situation of you go into their world. I really like this so far. Keep it up.

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[twilightfan28 52]

I really like the basis of the story, especially how it is different P.O.V

[twilightfan28 52]

The forth wall has once again been broken, but not by pinkie, but Rarity.

[twilightfan28 52]

I like how instead of just one, two ponies are breaking through the fourth wall, but my concern here, it's a bit short to repeat toto much details the story has already mentioned, but that's just my opinion

[twilightfan28 52]

There goes pinkie, telling off everypony's secrets xD. but I'm liking how the story line is going, its a pretty good fan fic

[twilightfan28 52]

Alright, flashback's are great, but i have one question, is the human, human in the alternate dimension, or has he been turned into a pony? Readers question

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[mars 4,861]

Hey @LMG, I've merged your topics.
Just a reminder to not start new topics each time you make a chapter of your story- a post on this thread will suffice.

[Burning Dusk 46]

This is a really great fanfic. I love the aspects of multiple povs. Also, i enjoy the fact another human who is a friend has come through also. Maybe you can make them longer. XD

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