ooc A personal letter for the one I have wronged 1x1 RP

[Yoshikupo 302]

@@Illiad Easle,

I know, we can change it later but I did my best to try and end it so we can wrap it up...I'm not the greatest villein

[Illiad Easle 3,172]

@@Yoshikupo,

When we turn this into a actual story I'll help you rework the villain parts, the story line will still be pretty much the same. 

[Yoshikupo 302]

@@Illiad Easle,

would it be better if Jade said not to open it then it eats Selena inside to where she opens it on her own then discovers the memories and has a heated conversation with Jade that leads him to tell her that Luna told him what was inside which makes her think he was trying to hide it from her.

[Illiad Easle 3,172]

@@Yoshikupo,

The story would move quickest if he says to open the box now, if he doesn't then Luna will recommend it. I think Jade would look braver by telling her to open it and would look like a coward if he wanted it to stay closed. It makes a good mental debate for him to think this in his head before deciding. But overall I think it would be better to say to open it. 

@@Yoshikupo,

 

Alright then, If there is anything you didn't like about the flashback please let me know. I had a bit of trouble piecing the history together in a way that made sense, but this timeline seems to work best, at least in my mind.

 

Get ready for Part 3, Jigsaw's Revenge.

@@Yoshikupo,

So I have one of every class on my team,

 

 

Scout Pegasus Pitcher Soldier Earth Pony Banister Pyro Dragon 'Black' Heavy Griffon Mikhail Medic Unicorn Jigsaw Demo Zebra Tavish Sniper Thestral Moondye Spy Changeling Sun-cloak Engineer Deer Dell

I haven't pounded out their load-outs yet, but for the most part they are medieval, Mikhail has a chain crossbow similar to Dell's sentry. I will refer to them by class in the story so their names don't get mixed up. The most story method would be for Jade to escape, killing off the team members on his path the freedom while the other team works to take out the door guards. I don't really know where I want this story to go at this point, but I have at least some idea.

[Yoshikupo 302]

@@Illiad Easle,

I would be fine with this, if I was a tactician but I'm not and thinking of everything like that racks my brain and I'm in school still. I also think the whole TF2 thing is completely unneeded, I'm thinking to make it something I would like and like to read, this is more like playing a game then reading a story. Why do you think I tried to make it into something interesting with suspense and plot points put in. (aka, not saying what happened to Topaz, the record, and the diamond that I think Selena should have taken to make my plan of it being like a magic eye work...I think I can make it do something else but still) I'm just saying, would you like to read an outcome of capture the flag in TF2 or read a well crafted book that has interesting characters, great plot points, and have an overall feel of just that it worked well together. (it's also a little bit of a bomb shell to have this happen in the middle of the story/part 3) (also probably shouldn't have done the hole percent thing as well)

Edited October 13, 2015 by Yoshikupo

[Illiad Easle 3,172]

@@Yoshikupo
You know, I was just thinking about changing it in that there would not be the second team, it would be just Jade fighting his way out with Selena fighting her way in, each in an effort to save the other from Jigsaw.
That would make a better story I think.

 

Alright, I changed my post up a bit. Is that better?

Edited October 13, 2015 by Illiad Easle

[Yoshikupo 302]

@@Illiad Easle,

now your thinking like a writer! Then have them miss or find each other halve way, if its the miss each other then Jade would instantly go back to try and save her from what Jigsaw has planned, it's like the reverse of the beginning. Selena has the crazy nut job this time but he has different plans, like probably killing Jade in front of her eyes to show that he got what he deserved...would not happen ever but my mind is sick and twisted and a little like Page's seeing a tragedy happening in her mind all the time, well not all the time but you catch my drift.

[Illiad Easle 3,172]

@@Yoshikupo,

Remember, this is my first time as a DM, I was thinking they meet halfway, only to get recaptured and then have to fight their way out together. Super romantic I know.

 

Also, I was going to cut one of Jade's wings off, how's that for dark? Just one, the other would be perfectly fine, in fact I may not cut all of his wing off, just enough for it to be useless for flying. maybe then I'd remove a rib or two, shatter a forelimb, stab him multiple times in the chest, that sort of thing. I just didn't want it to be really dark.

[Yoshikupo 302]

@@Illiad Easle,

uhhhh...remember the whole NSFW thing, we don't want to cross that line, how about pulling a few feathers? We can say they grow back like how a horn on a unicorn can or something, due to magic...maybe have a broken wing not cut off because broken bones heal, cut one don't. Say Jigsaw imagined the cracking of bones when he remembered Jade and stabbing but lite stabbing (I won't except having a chopped limb to come back even by magic...also I like the captured together idea as it could be like where they escape by working together, I just don't want to be banned from the forums from this story so we won't mention the processes and visuals just that it is basically happening to him as Jigsaw is a nut job)

[Illiad Easle 3,172]

@@Yoshikupo,

 

Like I said, I didn't want it to be too dark, which is why it likely won't happen here. it will likely get more detailed when it turns into a real story where we can have darker content.

But I don't mind keeping it light if that is what you want. 

[Yoshikupo 302]

@@Illiad Easle,

yeah lets not show explicit things at all, I have bad dreams already, I don't need new ones when we create the story or even now!

[Illiad Easle 3,172]

@@Yoshikupo,

 

Fine then, you do need to get moving, I did leave those surgeon simulator tools next to you. 

[Illiad Easle 3,172]

Jade sneaks on the ceiling trying to get to anywhere that was not there from the hallway, he looks for anything while he goes down the hall so he can make sure where he is going

 

So is he headed south down the south exit? or is he going for the east exit? I can't really tell.

Also, the recommendation is to look and listen often here. It will help against possibilities of ambush. 

Also, how load would you consider Jade's flapping? on a scale of 1(a butterfly landing on a q-tip) to 10(the sound of a strong wind.)

If you want to do sight sound checks you can call for them here and I'll tell you what you see/hear.

Edited October 16, 2015 by Illiad Easle

[Yoshikupo 302]

south down the south exit

as for Jades flight, 3, quite to the point you would not hear him above you and 6 or 7 for if he's flying away from something

[Illiad Easle 3,172]

@@Yoshikupo,

 

I initially forgot Luna's scene, it is there now. 

 

You can get whatever weapons you want from RED, even getting additional ponies if you want. Nothing more advanced than a crossbow though, if you have questions I can answer them. 

Edited October 19, 2015 by Illiad Easle

[Illiad Easle 3,172]

@@Yoshikupo,

 

You successfully disabled three in a very creative way, I did not expect that but can agree that it was quite effective.