[Ska/Punk] Luna Ticks - If Pinkie's Happy

[idkQuicksilver 48]

Here's our track from the new P@D album Starlit Flames: 

 

 

 

 

be sure to check out the other talented artists on this album!

[Courageous Thunder Dash 7,824]

Very nice. 

 

However, there are a few things I must point out

 

1. That intro guitar is a bit too clippy. I can hear a bit of grundgy noise, that sort of clouds the sound a bit. On the subject of your guitars, a super subtle chorus and some high end could brighten up your distortion. The distortion's a bit dry. 

2. The vocals on the first verse sound too strained and unnatural. It seems like the singer here is trying too hard to hit those notes. More training on hitting those notes could help, because although he's hitting the notes, it seems like they could flat out at any second. Also, make sure that you're regulating your breaths. Be sure not to stuff too many words in one breath, especially with those high-end tenor notes the male vocal on the first part was hitting. 

3. Your chord progressions are a bit unclear. It sounds like you're hitting the root most often, hitting the IV and vi using their inverted states. What I suggest is to make sure that when you hit chords, be sure to hit the root of the exact chord. Since you're in E major, hit A for the IV and C# for the vi. Also, for the IV, you can add a 9th to make it a suspended IV (after removing the 3rd note of this chord, which is C#). Make sure you state the V clearly, when called for. It may have sounded like you hit a suspended IV over the V in an inverted position, which is notated like this: B-E-A. After hitting this chord, immediately, go to the V in root position, which is B-D#-F#. 

4. Your drums are too shallow. They need a bit of low-end to give it that depth that it lacks, especially with the tom runs you've got for the fill-ins of this piece. 

 

All in all, this is a well crafted piece, but it could always be revamped for improvement. 

[idkQuicksilver 48]

Very nice. 

 

However, there are a few things I must point out

 

1. That intro guitar is a bit too clippy. I can hear a bit of grundgy noise, that sort of clouds the sound a bit. On the subject of your guitars, a super subtle chorus and some high end could brighten up your distortion. The distortion's a bit dry. 

2. The vocals on the first verse sound too strained and unnatural. It seems like the singer here is trying too hard to hit those notes. More training on hitting those notes could help, because although he's hitting the notes, it seems like they could flat out at any second. Also, make sure that you're regulating your breaths. Be sure not to stuff too many words in one breath, especially with those high-end tenor notes the male vocal on the first part was hitting. 

3. Your chord progressions are a bit unclear. It sounds like you're hitting the root most often, hitting the IV and vi using their inverted states. What I suggest is to make sure that when you hit chords, be sure to hit the root of the exact chord. Since you're in E major, hit A for the IV and C# for the vi. Also, for the IV, you can add a 9th to make it a suspended IV (after removing the 3rd note of this chord, which is C#). Make sure you state the V clearly, when called for. It may have sounded like you hit a suspended IV over the V in an inverted position, which is notated like this: B-E-A. After hitting this chord, immediately, go to the V in root position, which is B-D#-F#. 

4. Your drums are too shallow. They need a bit of low-end to give it that depth that it lacks, especially with the tom runs you've got for the fill-ins of this piece. 

 

All in all, this is a well crafted piece, but it could always be revamped for improvement. 

 

Thanks for checking it out. I'll try not to sound too defensive in responding,

 

1) Nope, I really don't think that adding any of those effects will benefit the guitar track (less is more). If anything my distortion is too wet. Hmm.. maybe a couple of noise gates with some phaser and flanger, a compressor or 2, and some automated wah.

 

2) Yep, I'll let Vaceslav know that he needs to upgrade his mic

3) I'll take unclear chord progressions as a compliment meaning that I'm being progressive and non-cliche   . 

4) Sure, I'll keep that in mind I'll make sure to low-pass them next time, maybe add about +12db in the 0-800 Hz range. 

[Courageous Thunder Dash 7,824]

 

 

3) I'll take unclear chord progressions as a compliment meaning that I'm being progressive and non-cliche   . 

 

Just make sure you're not putting too many notes in your chords, as they'll start to sound more like clusters rather than chords.  

[SynBassilicious Pony 322]

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Edited January 30, 2023 by SynBassilicious Pony

[idkQuicksilver 48]

Low-pass is for removing frequencies higher than a certain value and for allowing frequencies lower than a certain value.  For example, low-passing a guitar at 18,000 Hz means you're removing the frequencies over 18,000 Hz.

 

Adding +12 dB seems like it would be too high.  Since the Addictive Drums presets are already processed, they don't need much additional processing.  Try tweaking the EQ in AD's "Edit" tab.

 

Also make sure other instruments aren't interfering with the drums; e.g., the bass should not interfere with the kick.

 

 

I know, I know. I was being really sarcastic in my response. I would never use such a convoluted Guitar set-up, tell Vaceslav that he can't sing, or cut all the highs on my drums lol. I'll try and put a disclaimer when I'm joking next time.

[SynBassilicious Pony 322]

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Edited January 30, 2023 by SynBassilicious Pony