fallout equestria fan comic

[shirofluff 17]

Um hi! i made this comic and i want it to be seen by others in the community. its the first page of my comic featuring my characters. idk if its allowed here but i thought i might try, thank you!

[Venomous 18,813]

@shirofluff

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[Astral Vision 286]

@shirofluff

I think your comic has a good beginning, though it's hard to tell if he's yelling in the second panel besides the exclamation marks and bubble shape. The lettering could be a little bigger, and his eye pupils could be a bit more dilated to create a frustrated expression.

Other than that, and also the need for *yay* sensors, your comic is off to a good start. Keep up the hard work.