Phaeston-e12 173 July 9, 2012 Share July 9, 2012 Moved to Tucson, experimented a bit with my style. First attempt turned out to be an absolute disaster and second turned out bit better but I didn't color it. Critical criticism on the general linework would be very much appreciated. The uncolored version is the second attempt picture and I realized that there's some kind of blip on her neck which I'm going to spend some time tomorrow trying to get rid of. I just do not like the colored version because of so many problems associated with it. Her face is weird, linework is just too dark and her hindleg is messed up. I've at least learn some many things while trying these pieces. 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Azura 1,107 July 9, 2012 Share July 9, 2012 The second one looks great! 1 My Signature Shop!-=-=-=-=-Art Collection!-=-=-=-=-A Signature Tutorial! Also known as "Cloud Chaser". My Ponysona, Azura. Avatar & Signature by me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nightfall 3,950 July 9, 2012 Share July 9, 2012 I like them both! 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phaeston-e12 173 July 9, 2012 Author Share July 9, 2012 I like them both! Maybe I'm just too critical, I just couldn't stand the colored picture and ended up taking it down from my DA page. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FortyShadows 217 July 9, 2012 Share July 9, 2012 Maybe I'm just too critical, I just couldn't stand the colored picture and ended up taking it down from my DA page. Maybe it's a bit rushed. Just take your time. x3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dusty Soul 2,614 July 9, 2012 Share July 9, 2012 This is great. Nice job! Soundcloud-------------------Facebook---------------------------Youtube Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silverwisp the Bard 2,354 July 9, 2012 Share July 9, 2012 The legs seem a bit too skinny in the 2nd one and the ears just a wee bit too far apart. Can't find anything to criticize in the first one. My Art Thread, updated (almost) daily Tomorrow will take us away, far from home No one will ever know our names But the bard songs will remain. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Finesthour 7,289 July 9, 2012 Share July 9, 2012 My critique: First picture: Very nice line work, very clean and smooth. The expression your alicorn has is priceless, I love it. His/her hair is quite simply amazing. The hoof that sticks out under the towel however is very bony and frail. You would think an alicorn would have srong, thick hooves. The horn is nice and pointy, unlike other artists who make it rounded. 4/5 Second picture: Once agian your line work is quite simply clean and smooth. The hooves are bony, which seems to be your style. The hair is nice and ruffled, giving it a nice look. Dat cutie mark. All I can say for that. The expression is remarkable, once again. Can't say much for the horn. The wing looks magnificent. 4/5 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roi 100 July 10, 2012 Share July 10, 2012 Love it,i love how you put the ''Lol Blank'' note Oc: http://mlpforums.com/page/roleplay-characters/_/frost-valkenhayn-r3552 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phaeston-e12 173 July 10, 2012 Author Share July 10, 2012 My critique: First picture: Very nice line work, very clean and smooth. The expression your alicorn has is priceless, I love it. His/her hair is quite simply amazing. The hoof that sticks out under the towel however is very bony and frail. You would think an alicorn would have srong, thick hooves. The horn is nice and pointy, unlike other artists who make it rounded. 4/5 Second picture: Once agian your line work is quite simply clean and smooth. The hooves are bony, which seems to be your style. The hair is nice and ruffled, giving it a nice look. Dat cutie mark. All I can say for that. The expression is remarkable, once again. Can't say much for the horn. The wing looks magnificent. 4/5 Thank you, you are very correct on hoof being perhaps too skinny. I'm going to work on trying to get a right proportion for that. The second picture however I am still not that pleased with, I had a feeling that the picture wasn't going to work out too well because I felt my underdrawing had a several issues; and all those issues became more pronounced after I've applied the linework. However like the artist I've been learning from have said 'stick with what you have done and learn from your mistake after you are finished.' Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Miss Light Diamond 2,803 July 10, 2012 Share July 10, 2012 (edited) That's awesome Edited July 10, 2012 by Flame Dancer Something something something something Ask me stuff...and all my OC's Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Finesthour 7,289 July 10, 2012 Share July 10, 2012 Thank you, you are very correct on hoof being perhaps too skinny. I'm going to work on trying to get a right proportion for that. The second picture however I am still not that pleased with, I had a feeling that the picture wasn't going to work out too well because I felt my underdrawing had a several issues; and all those issues became more pronounced after I've applied the linework. However like the artist I've been learning from have said 'stick with what you have done and learn from your mistake after you are finished.' Don't misunderstand me, these are both very good drawings. I rather enjoy the second one much more than the first, honestly. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phaeston-e12 173 July 10, 2012 Author Share July 10, 2012 (edited) Don't misunderstand me, these are both very good drawings. I rather enjoy the second one much more than the first, honestly. Thank you =) Updated version with full color and background done. I've decided that I should at least make it a complete picture instead leaving it like that. Edit: realized one of the fill was missing; fixed it. Edited July 10, 2012 by ein12 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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