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At last, the light at the end of the tunnel.


I have reached it.


No, it is not the light of the heavens.


It is greatest for when I am alive.


For that light, the light that I have finaly found.


Is the warm fuzzy feeling that I have looked for.


From this past year, the feeling subsided, hiding under the pit of darkness.


But, as time will tell, the feeling broke a hole through the darkness.


It put it's warming touch into my heart, killing the darkness I posses.


That feeling, you see, is happiness.


I know what I want to do with my life.


I want people to be happy.


I want others to feel how I do now.


No one deserves to feel pain that I have felt, so my journey to cause happiness begins.


Starting with whoever I reach in my path.


It may be you, it may be someone else.


All I know is, I cannot wait for the adventurer of my life.


The adventure of happiness is afoot, and I am on the train.


Won't you join me?

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I would give you the same advice as I gave Wisdom Lace.

 

I think you should work on the structure of the poem itself.

 

Threw it together in 5 seconds.

 

Not really caring how good it is <3

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Threw it together in 5 seconds.

 

Not really caring how good it is <3

 

Even though you only threw it together quickly, it's still a good poem, and still better than any poem that I could think of, even if I spent hours on it. :lol:

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