Finesthour 7,277 Posted January 1, 2012 Share Posted January 1, 2012 At last, the light at the end of the tunnel. I have reached it. No, it is not the light of the heavens. It is greatest for when I am alive. For that light, the light that I have finaly found. Is the warm fuzzy feeling that I have looked for. From this past year, the feeling subsided, hiding under the pit of darkness. But, as time will tell, the feeling broke a hole through the darkness. It put it's warming touch into my heart, killing the darkness I posses. That feeling, you see, is happiness. I know what I want to do with my life. I want people to be happy. I want others to feel how I do now. No one deserves to feel pain that I have felt, so my journey to cause happiness begins. Starting with whoever I reach in my path. It may be you, it may be someone else. All I know is, I cannot wait for the adventurer of my life. The adventure of happiness is afoot, and I am on the train. Won't you join me? 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inkfeather 597 Posted January 1, 2012 Share Posted January 1, 2012 I would give you the same advice as I gave Wisdom Lace. I think you should work on the structure of the poem itself. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Finesthour 7,277 Posted January 1, 2012 Author Share Posted January 1, 2012 I would give you the same advice as I gave Wisdom Lace. I think you should work on the structure of the poem itself. Threw it together in 5 seconds. Not really caring how good it is <3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inkfeather 597 Posted January 1, 2012 Share Posted January 1, 2012 I still ask this of you. Consider how the words play with each other. Nice poem though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pondus30 152 Posted January 1, 2012 Share Posted January 1, 2012 Nice poem Happy happy joy joy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wonka 39 Posted January 1, 2012 Share Posted January 1, 2012 Threw it together in 5 seconds. Not really caring how good it is <3 Even though you only threw it together quickly, it's still a good poem, and still better than any poem that I could think of, even if I spent hours on it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
83awsm 233 Posted January 1, 2012 Share Posted January 1, 2012 Threw it together in 5 seconds. Not really caring how good it is <3 Sweet poem dude! I could never do anything like that in a couple of minutes, you sir have a very creative mind! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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