My Oc Groggy.Critique?

[GroggyPony 10]

Another style I’ve tryed.

It’s the only way I kind of know to do line less art >w<

 

I’m looking more to improve my drawings. I’m also trying to use a few different
styles of drawing and this is one of them though I don't think I will use it
often.
 

There background/personality is still in the works but I have it posted it
on my profile page. (In short, the background of Groggy is under construction)
If you’d like to help me with it though that would be great >w< but it
will be pretty hard as I’m bad with story, background etc.

 

I’m starting to want a character who is trying to be more at peace with the
world around them

 ^-^

 

There were some doodles made with this as well and I have no real reason for
them just something to post I guess.

 

Edited January 25, 2013 by GroggyPony

[Bohtty 1,775]

It looks less like a pony and more like a donkey/mule to me. I think it's primarily the tail that causes the impression though. A possible suggestion would be to increase the contrast. All of the colors of the skin are too close in value in my opinion.

[Strawberry Tart 161]

The colored art is really good by fan-art standards. I'd give it an 8/10, and I'll tell you why.

 

The thing about him that most catches my eye is the horn. Everything is shaded and beautiful...except the horn. But, since it's small, I can imagine it would be hard to shade it without going overboard (so be careful). The neck looks a bit thin, too - if you made it any thinner poor Groggy wouldn't be able to keep his head up. So don't be afraid to make that a bit thicker. Besides that, Groggy looks like he's sitting on hair, because his mane is the same color as the shadow under him. Changing the color of either one would fix that.

 

Yeah, except for that, there's nothing really wrong with it. I like your style, and the way you changed the "typical pony" image and made his tail different. The face expression and colors emphasize sadness and loneliness to me, whether that's a good thing and you meant that, or if you want him to be a rather happier pony, is up to you. The detail is cool; I like the freckles especially. Keep going, and I hope you come up with a background, personality, and cutie mark for him!

[GroggyPony 10]

It looks less like a pony and more like a donkey/mule to me. I think it's primarily the tail that causes the impression though. A possible suggestion would be to increase the contrast. All of the colors of the skin are too close in value in my opinion.

 

Groggy is more mule like :3 the design comes from old English unicorns. Groggy has a beard when a tad older too, but I guess maybe I need to change that to having the beard around at all stages of life

(that’s another confusing aspect now that I think about it)

 

umm I will try and get the values better next time, thank you ^-^

 

The colored art is really good by fan-art standards. I'd give it an 8/10, and I'll tell you why.

 

The thing about him that most catches my eye is the horn. Everything is shaded and beautiful...except the horn. But, since it's small, I can imagine it would be hard to shade it without going overboard (so be careful). The neck looks a bit thin, too - if you made it any thinner poor Groggy wouldn't be able to keep his head up. So don't be afraid to make that a bit thicker. Besides that, Groggy looks like he's sitting on hair, because his mane is the same color as the shadow under him. Changing the color of either one would fix that.

 

Yeah, except for that, there's nothing really wrong with it. I like your style, and the way you changed the "typical pony" image and made his tail different. The face expression and colors emphasize sadness and loneliness to me, whether that's a good thing and you meant that, or if you want him to be a rather happier pony, is up to you. The detail is cool; I like the freckles especially. Keep going, and I hope you come up with a background, personality, and cutie mark for him!

yha his horn can be a bit hard at times, its meant to be ivory and shade on

ivory tents to look more muted and kind of yellowed and high lights tend to not

really effect ivory (unless it is glossed with something).

 

Due to this going over board is kind of easy to do so I was too scared of

going overboard with it so that instead, it didn’t get the tender love and care

it needed v-v

 

As for the neck that’s kind of funny that you say to not be afraid to make

it thicker XD cuz I had it thicker but then was worried that it looked wrong so

a chickened out and made it thinner. I will stick more to what I had originally

next time and see if that works more ^-^

 

“Besides that, Groggy looks like he's sitting on hair, because his mane is

the same color as the shadow under him. Changing the color of either one would

fix that.”

 

It is hair. It’s trimmed more straightly than originally (where it’s scruffy

from never being brushed) but it is hair. Old English unicorns often have feathering

behind their legs, and that is where the design is based on. And apart from

that yha Groggy is sitting on air as there was no plan for a background.

 

“The face expression and colors emphasize sadness and loneliness to me” yes!

That is what I wanted ^-^ yay.

As for the cutie mark, I intend it to be a lantern. Groggy carries a lantern

around, it’s meant to be the lantern from Amnesia but I need to get better at

drawing lanterns v.v

 

It’s meant to be more of a symbolic cutie mark and I’m working on making the

short story for when Groggy received it when walking home.

[Strawberry Tart 161]

Glad that the melancholy/lonely part is what you wanted, and the not-your-typical-unicorn thing you've got going on is awesome!

Groggy is more mule like :3 the design comes from old English unicorns. Groggy has a beard when a tad older too, but I guess maybe I need to change that to having the beard around at all stages of life

(that’s another confusing aspect now that I think about it)

 

umm I will try and get the values better next time, thank you ^-^

yha his horn can be a bit hard at times, its meant to be ivory and shade on
ivory tents to look more muted and kind of yellowed and high lights tend to not
really effect ivory (unless it is glossed with something).

 

Due to this going over board is kind of easy to do so I was too scared of
going overboard with it so that instead, it didn’t get the tender love and care
it needed v-v

 

As for the neck that’s kind of funny that you say to not be afraid to make
it thicker XD cuz I had it thicker but then was worried that it looked wrong so
a chickened out and made it thinner. I will stick more to what I had originally
next time and see if that works more ^-^
 

“Besides that, Groggy looks like he's sitting on hair, because his mane is
the same color as the shadow under him. Changing the color of either one would
fix that.”
 

It is hair. It’s trimmed more straightly than originally (where it’s scruffy
from never being brushed) but it is hair. Old English unicorns often have feathering
behind their legs, and that is where the design is based on. And apart from
that yha Groggy is sitting on air as there was no plan for a background.

 

“The face expression and colors emphasize sadness and loneliness to me” yes!
That is what I wanted ^-^ yay.

As for the cutie mark, I intend it to be a lantern. Groggy carries a lantern
around, it’s meant to be the lantern from Amnesia but I need to get better at
drawing lanterns v.v

 

It’s meant to be more of a symbolic cutie mark and I’m working on making the
short story for when Groggy received it when walking home.

Edited January 26, 2013 by Strawberry Tart