Count to a million

[CandleCandleCandles 2,012]

80441

Edited May 31, 2014 by The Candlekeeper

[Rainbow Eclipse 3,927]

80421

 

Okay, Anala, I'll give you some pointers.

 

In the first sentence, there are four spelling errors. And you can't just say you're awesome, you have to show yourself being "awesome". Also, when writing sentences, numbers should be spelt out, unless it would be very long. Also, where did the ninjas come from? You can't just say "this happened", you have to build it up. Also, shaking your... rump? Really? Objectifying your body is not good character development. Also, if they're ninjas, they should have been able to get away before being hit with arrows. Not personal experience, I've just read a lot of ninja books. And the ending is just ridiculously out-of-nowhere. Why did you become an alicorn?

 

The story is also littered with spelling errors.

 

I hope my criticism helped.

 

*blinks* So... does that mean I win?

Edited May 31, 2014 by Blue Eclipse

[CandleCandleCandles 2,012]

80443

 

XD

Edited May 31, 2014 by The Candlekeeper

[DubWolf 18,611]

80444

 

That was funny .

[Deae Rising Shine~ 57,403]

80.444

 

XD

[Rainbow Eclipse 3,927]

80445

80444

That was funny .

Which one? Anala's fic, or Cassidy's criticism?

[DubWolf 18,611]

80445

 

And back into the eternal silence... Unless bloo continues!

 

Both!

Edited May 31, 2014 by Super80 Wolf

[CandleCandleCandles 2,012]

80447

[DubWolf 18,611]

80448

 

In this other forum, it was against the rules to only post the number; you had to say something :comeatus:.

 

Say anything.

Edited May 31, 2014 by Super80 Wolf

[Rainbow Eclipse 3,927]

80445

 

And back into the eternal silence... Unless bloo continues!

 

Both!

*proofreads Riley's clopfic*

Edited May 31, 2014 by Blue Eclipse

[CandleCandleCandles 2,012]

80449

 

Anything?

Edited May 31, 2014 by The Candlekeeper

[Deae Rising Shine~ 57,403]

80.450

[CandleCandleCandles 2,012]

80453

[DubWolf 18,611]

80454

 

Anything :comeatus:.

 

Clopfic ?

[Rainbow Eclipse 3,927]

80455

 

*resigns*

[CandleCandleCandles 2,012]

80455

 

Anything.

[Deae Rising Shine~ 57,403]

80.457

 

get ninjad to 99%

[DubWolf 18,611]

80458

 

I think I just got a member banned... Stupid stupid stupid... Can admins read PMs?

[CandleCandleCandles 2,012]

80458

 

I'd assume so, Wolfie.

Edited May 31, 2014 by The Candlekeeper

[DubWolf 18,611]

80459

 

Heh, he resigned!

 

And you guys don't have to say anything .

[Deae Rising Shine~ 57,403]

80.641

[CandleCandleCandles 2,012]

80461

[DubWolf 18,611]

80463

 

Hrmm

[Rainbow Eclipse 3,927]

80463

[CandleCandleCandles 2,012]

80465

Edited May 31, 2014 by The Candlekeeper