adventure The Ballad Of the Ice Princess Part 1

[Commander Frost 731]

STILL UNDER CONSTRUCTION  im not finished with the fanfic

 

The sun was shining Brightly In Pony Ville. It was still early, so a lot of ponies weren't up yet. But Applejack Was. She had a lot of plans. After all the Grand Galloping Gala Was only a week and a half away, and she was in charge of the food for this year.

"Wooooh-Wee. I reckon I'll need some help to get all these treats for the gala." Aj Said.

She was almost done with the apple pies when Pinkie Pie showed up.

"Hey Applejack What'chya doin?"

"Well Howdy Pinkie. I'm just makin some sweet apple pies."

"OOOOOOO Can I help Please Please Please!?"

"Well sure just grab yourself an apron."

"Okie Dokie Loki!"

Pinkie put on the apron and went over to help out Applejack.

"Well Pinkie I've already made 27 pies I just need to make 45. Can you help me with that?"

"Sure!"

While Pinkie and Aj were making pies, Rarity and Fluttershy had there hooves full making dresses for every pony.

  "Well darling I think we should do blue this year. Celestia likes blue right?"

"Umm I don't really know, I just umm... think purple would be better. But your way is fine."

"Oh-No Fluttershy, you have as much say in this as I do. If it's not alright with you it's not alright with me."

"No really, it doesn't matter. You can pick which color you want."

Well while Fluttershy and Rarity we compromising on what color fabric they should use, Rainbow dash was up in the clouds doing what she called a big job.

*SNNNNNOOOOORRRREEEEE*

Lets leave her be for now.

yes just an ordinary day in Pony Ville.

KABOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM!!!!!

Suddenly, there was a huge explosion sound.

"Wha-?" Said all the ponies.

They all checked outside and saw on the outskirts of town, near the ever free forest, a giant white Ball hurl to the ground.

When they all ran to see The were stopped in there tracks with a magical white forcefeild.

"What's going on? What happened?" The ponies said.

When the forcefeild shuttered away, All the ponies gasped at what they saw.

A Cloud white Alicorn...

 

 

 

Twilight Sparkle was in her room at Canterlot Castle talking to spike.

"Oh Spike, What am I going to do?"

"I Think you should just tell Princess Celestia. I'm sure she'll understand."

"Spike it's not Princess Celestia I want to tell that-"

There is a slight knocking at the door.

"Come in" Twilight said.

It was Flash Sentry, Twilight's New boyfriend.

"Twilight you must come at once! Princesses Celestia, Luna, and Cadence need you in the throne room right away!" Flash said.

"Huh wonder what's going on. They would only call cadence here for an emergency." Twilight thought.

"Hurry let's go Twilight!" Said Spike.

"Your right Spike. Let's go!"

So the three of them hurried down the stairs to the throne room, with spike tripping once or twice on his new pants Twilight was making him try on for the wedding that will be happening soon.

When they reached the throne room Spike and twilight gasped in awe.

"Another Princess?" Said twilight.\

 

 

Part 2 : http://mlpforums.com/topic/78214-the-ballad-of-the-ice-princess-part-2/

If you like it so far tell me and if you have some Ideas pm me

Edited November 16, 2013 by Brony Dash465

[Mr. Changeling 132]

I like it so far, it is certainly unique and has a certain charm to it. All I could say would to work on the characters a tad bit. But besides that I really lik-

STILL UNDER CONSTRUCTION  im not finished with the fanfic

There is a slight knocking at the door.

"Come in" Twilight said.

It was Flash Sentry, Twilight's New boyfriend.

e some Ideas pm me

I revoke everything I said. This is BAD, and you should feel BAD!!!!

(but seriously, cant wait for part 2)

[Commander Frost 731]

I like it so far, it is certainly unique and has a certain charm to it. All I could say would to work on the characters a tad bit. But besides that I really lik-

I revoke everything I said. This is BAD, and you should feel BAD!!!!

(but seriously, cant wait for part 2)

ik ik the fandom hates me now lol but I did it cause its gonna come in use in the story later otherwise it wiuldnt make sense. lol

[Lovey Hearts27 2]

Hey, you are really good at writing! I like your fanfic! hope to see more of your work!

[Commander Frost 731]

Hey, you are really good at writing! I like your fanfic! hope to see more of your work!

thx I like the profile pic btw

[Lovey Hearts27 2]

thanks! I like your profile pic too! It's so 20% cooler then mine! 

[Commander Frost 731]

thanks! I like your profile pic too! It's so 20% cooler then mine! 

lol thx its my oc Rick starsheilder

[Lovey Hearts27 2]

cool!! Mine is of course Lovey Hearts. Lame name I know! But It all cute!

[Commander Frost 731]

cool!! Mine is of course Lovey Hearts. Lame name I know! But It all cute!

its not lame its nice and I like it.

[Lovey Hearts27 2]

thanks! I am glade some one does, most people are the ones that say such things. Poor Lovey! Any ways I might post part 1 here soon I am still working on it, but almost done. You are really good in writing, I don't know how I would do. We will see when that time comes. 

[BladeRunner 7]

thanks! I am glade some one does, most people are the ones that say such things. Poor Lovey! Any ways I might post part 1 here soon I am still working on it, but almost done. You are really good in writing, I don't know how I would do. We will see when that time comes. 

Everypony has their own opinion about certain things. Your names not lame Lovely Hearts. People just like to talk crud because they have nothing else to do. And Brony Dash I believe thats your name, keep up the good work on the story. i think it's looking good so far.

[OG Blaze 269]

Hey I love the story so far...has potential but your making a lot of fragments. I used to have a problem with over using commas but it looks like your handling this pretty well. Only other thing I could say is add more detail and when using say or said trying using other words that might work like retort, explain, complain, answered, replied. In any case it's shaping up pretty well keep up the good work