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Thanks for the feedback. Yeah, I made the clop a separate chapter in case it sucked, being the first explicit sex scene I've written. Also, being a virgin, my knowledge is limited. I haven't had anyone tell me it was poorly written yet (they all say what you said, pretty much). The sequel, A Bow In The Hoof, is gonna have the clop in the actual story, but it won't have any golden showers. I may include both male on male and female on female scenes, though. There's a pretty predominant theme of sexual freedom and social acceptance in the story. It'll give a little more background on Vinyl, and Octavia will be included. We already know Triad and Silver Bullet's history, pretty much.

Have you finished reading it? If so, what did you think? Anything I could improve on for next time? If you read the clop, is there something I should have done differently?

It is an apartment building, though. If their work shifts are different, they wouldn't leave at the same time. There are plenty of people in my building that I've never seen before, and I live in a townhouse.

I have written two fics recently about my OC, named Triad. He's based entirely on me, but his life is a little different. If anyone wants to read and review them, it would be appreciated. They contain explicit content, so I'll just put the links here. One is a sequel to the other, and it's only been started. http://www.fimfiction.net/story/107703/wubs-n-arpeggios http://www.fimfiction.net/story/111123/a-bow-in-the-hoof

I'm a new user, have been a brony for about six months, and I like to play guitar and write fanfiction.

I enjoy clop, I thought Equestria Girls was a great movie, and I love the LGBT community (although I don't believe in being politically correct). I'm also an atheist.