so what do you think?

[MallyTheAwesome 38]

posted on deviantArt. I hope you like it.. My deviantArt is MallyTheAwesome... gosh this looks terrible xD

[JonasDarkmane 19,788]

posted on deviantArt. I hope you like it.. My deviantArt is MallyTheAwesome... gosh this looks terrible xD

I really like it . Better than what I can do ^w^. Good job  

[Magic Rasin 180]

<NOTICE> I swear I'm not trying to be mean but I'm just going to provide feedback. I'm going to be brutally honest but I'll try to not come off as a jerk. </NOTICE>

 

• The lines are very messy. I can see pixels on the edge of pretty much every line along with lines going through eachother. I suggest going slower, correcting mistakes and also using a brush that uses anti-ailasing, which makes pixels on the edges of lines harder to notice, making lines look MUCH cleaner.

 

•   The eye facing us should be larger than the other eye. Also she looks cross-eyed. Make sure both of her eyes are focused on the same area, whether it's an object, the distance, something we can't see, or some point in the air.

 

•   Her forelegs are both a bit short and are pretty high up her chest. I suggest making them a tad longer along with moving them down. Imagine her standing, her forelegs should start at about the height her back legs would and be as long as they are.

 

• Her forehead is a bit too tall and oval shaped. Pony heads are generally circular, not oval shaped. Pony heads are basically circles with features attached to them. If you want to keep the oval heads I'd suggest making facial features bigger to compensate.

 

• Lighting is a real pain in the rear and difficult to explain how to do in text so I'll try my best to explain how lighting in art should be done (or at least the way I do it). The shading is everywhere. There's only one light source (the sun) projecting light onto Fluttershy. It's above and behind her so shading should be on the undersides of her and on parts facing towards us (wings, limbs, hair, everything not facing the sun).Everything not shaded should be lit up. The parts of her that are exposed to most of the light should be the brightest and have a bit of gloss (gloss not required but gives the idea of bright shading better) on the brightest bits. If you're just learning how to draw ponies I advise learning how to do that and shading separately.

 

• The background is pretty empty. I suggest adding some clouds or distant objects/terrain.

 

Well that's everything I've got for this piece. Sorry for the essay and sorry if I came off as mean. I'm only trying to provide criticism. Tell me how I did and whether I came off as mean or not.

[MallyTheAwesome 38]

 

<NOTICE> I swear I'm not trying to be mean but I'm just going to provide feedback. I'm going to be brutally honest but I'll try to not come off as a jerk. </NOTICE>

 

• The lines are very messy. I can see pixels on the edge of pretty much every line along with lines going through eachother. I suggest going slower, correcting mistakes and also using a brush that uses anti-ailasing, which makes pixels on the edges of lines harder to notice, making lines look MUCH cleaner.

 

•   The eye facing us should be larger than the other eye. Also she looks cross-eyed. Make sure both of her eyes are focused on the same area, whether it's an object, the distance, something we can't see, or some point in the air.

 

•   Her forelegs are both a bit short and are pretty high up her chest. I suggest making them a tad longer along with moving them down. Imagine her standing, her forelegs should start at about the height her back legs would and be as long as they are.

 

• Her forehead is a bit too tall and oval shaped. Pony heads are generally circular, not oval shaped. Pony heads are basically circles with features attached to them. If you want to keep the oval heads I'd suggest making facial features bigger to compensate.

 

• Lighting is a real pain in the rear and difficult to explain how to do in text so I'll try my best to explain how lighting in art should be done (or at least the way I do it). The shading is everywhere. There's only one light source (the sun) projecting light onto Fluttershy. It's above and behind her so shading should be on the undersides of her and on parts facing towards us (wings, limbs, hair, everything not facing the sun).Everything not shaded should be lit up. The parts of her that are exposed to most of the light should be the brightest and have a bit of gloss (gloss not required but gives the idea of bright shading better) on the brightest bits. If you're just learning how to draw ponies I advise learning how to do that and shading separately.

 

• The background is pretty empty. I suggest adding some clouds or distant objects/terrain.

 

Well that's everything I've got for this piece. Sorry for the essay and sorry if I came off as mean. I'm only trying to provide criticism. Tell me how I did and whether I came off as mean or not.

 

Heh, it's fine. I used to be good at drawing ponies. xD Thanks for the tips