My First FiMFiction (Dark, Adventure), Feedback requested

[Bastard Pony 0]

Hello! I just started writing my first FiMFiction (actually my first story of any kind).

 

It is an adventure story that will have multiple chapters (first chapter complete). It doesn't include any MLP show characters, and takes place on the outskirts of the Crystal Empire.

 

Short Description:

A timid stallion of the Royal Guard must aid a distant village against an unforeseen horror, and must call upon an irregular bunch of travelers for help.

 

Here is a link to the story: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/282377/1/prey-of-the-night/chapter-1-a-plea-for-help

 

 

Let me know what you think so far and if I should continue writing this.

[Odyssey 5,713]

Hello @Bastard Pony,

 

As this topic showcases a fanfiction, I have moved your topic to Pony Artwork's Fan Fiction section.