writing //Phoenix//

[MermaidPony 8]

Hi there!

 

This story (the story rhymes ) basiclly started as an english homework. I was writing something that I thought my teacher would appreciate, but then I realized it's a bit too dark for an english assignment. Anyway, if I could get a piece of your mind about my writing. I wasn't really sure about the word 'nemesis', because I wasn't really sure about it's translation, so I used google. The translation it gave me was enough, so.... let me know!

 

 

 

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When the fire is already out and the tears are already dry, when the areas surrounding you smell like smoke, where you cried. Hiding in the corner, that's where she is, in the bright room, in the darkest night. Music is playing from the outside, the moon is barely bright, but she knows that her fears bloom at night.

That's where she hides, a phoenix with no wings, that's how she lives, terrorized by her own dreams. Tears won't go out anymore, it's not as it seems- there is no way to go, and right then, she screams. Sara's not afraid from a harming hand, Sara's not afraid when she's with her friends, but late at night, when no one can hear, Sara's happy places suddenly disappear. Everything seems cold and bad, and Sara's tears already want to come out.

'Everything will be alright', that's what she was told, but Sara feels like her soul was already sold. Who will be the one that will save her from the trouble, when she inhales the fog of the nightmares into her lungs?

Who will be the one that will save Sara from her enemies, when she sees herself as the only nemesis?