open Alicorn's Ailment (Retry)

[Loyal Defender 4,111]

(Fun fact – when I was raging irl over a Russian Essay, I forgot my mom came back home shortly so she heard me raging XD)

 

 

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[Sparklefan1234 170,667]

What's all that racket!? 

Loyal's mad about something, I dunno. *shrugs*

Edited March 23, 2018 by Sparklefan1234

[Loyal Defender 4,111]

 

“WHY DOES EVERYONE WANT TO TREAT ME LIKE DIRT?! FIRST RAINBOW’S RUDE AWAKENING, THEN TRIXIE LIES TO ME, MAKING ME LOOK LIKE A SOFTIE TOWARDS HER WHEN SHE DIDN’T EVEN NEED IT! I THOUGHT MY LIFE WAS SUPPOSED TO BE SIMPLE! BUT NO! EVERYONE’S JUST OUT TO GET ME! EVERYTHING WAS SUPPOSED TO BE GLORIOUS! BUT NOW EVERYTHING’S JUST…..GAAHHHHHHH! WHAT’S THE POINT IN TRYING?! I’M ONLY EVER USED FOR ANYTHING IN THIS WORLD! I WISH I HADN'T EVEN MET TRIXIE!” At this point, my magic turned a solid black, making the room shake even more. I felt darkness surging through my veins.

 

 

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[Sparklefan1234 170,667]

 

(Is this good? Does it help move the story forward well or does Loyal have too many "enemies"?)

Edited March 23, 2018 by Sparklefan1234

[Loyal Defender 4,111]

(OH, don't worry - if RD's out, he only has one enemy now. Layol's just...an ass, really, less of an enemy...until the finale.)

 

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I felt my anger turn to sadness, salty tears flowing down my cheeks as I slowly stopped blasting everything. I covered my face and silently began wishing I was happier….why did everyone want to be so mean to me? Was I really this vulnerable?

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Edited March 23, 2018 by Loyal Defender

[Sparklefan1234 170,667]

*Starlight Glimmer hears the noise coming from Loyal's room, concerned*

 

Loyal, is everything ok? 

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[Loyal Defender 4,111]

“WHAT DO YOU WANT?!” I roared, before wincing, seeing who it was. “Oh..I-I’m so sorry…..I’m not in the best of moods right now since the Terrible and Weak Trixie lied to me completely. All this time she was acting selfish, purposefully implying you belonged to her, purposefully buying the smallest cone possible for me, purposefully acting like you didn't want to be friends with her, all to trick me into feeling bad and then telling me she was faking all of it. So forgive me if I'm not exactly happy!"

 

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[Sparklefan1234 170,667]

Oh, is that all? 

 

Trixie was just testing you to see how much you *really* cared about your friendship with her.

 

We even made up that "Friendship break-up" story to give it a little something extra.

I guess Trixie took it *too* far, huh? 

 

Edited March 23, 2018 by Sparklefan1234

[Loyal Defender 4,111]

What? WHAT? WHAT?!

 

“HAVE YOU ANY IDEA HOW ANGRY YOU TWO MADE ME?! I DON'T EVEN CARE ABOUT HER ANYMORE! SHE'S JUST MADE ME HATE HER!”

 

 

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[Sparklefan1234 170,667]

(That's what happens when Loyal tries to make friends with two antagonists.)

Edited March 23, 2018 by Sparklefan1234

[Loyal Defender 4,111]

And here come the tear flows again… “I can’t believe you two would do this to me….I thought you cared about me...I thought you respected my boundaries...I THOUGHT YOU WERE MY FRIEND!” I could only see tears in my eyes and crystal walls as I took off, brushing past her, locking myself in my room and hiding under the bed. Not the blanket – the bed. I just wanted to hide here for the rest of my life. First Rainbow….now Trixie...now Starlight. If I faced one more pony who mistreated me, I would snap like a twig and go from Mr. Nice Guy to Mr. Destructo.

Tears still flowing, I poofed up a letter, and wrote to Luna again.

 

“I can’t take it anymore. Everypony’s just been tormenting me….first Rainbow Dash gives me the definition of ‘rude awakening’, Trixie, Starlight Glimmer’s friend, just decides to be a total jerk to me, from buying me the smallest ice-cream cone, to acting like only Starlight could be her friend, and then today, acts like she and Starlight were no longer friends, just to ‘test my friendship’. Please, just….I just want to be with you...where no one can ever hurt me again. Far away from this place...I don’t want to hurt anyone, but if I’m insulted or lied to one more time, I’m just going to unleash all Tartarus...and I want to avoid that as much as possible...even if it means royal isolation. Please, this is urgent….if I can’t do that, I don’t know what to do….’

 

Signed,

 

Loyal Defender

[Sparklefan1234 170,667]

(Loyal still has: Twilight Sparkle, Spike, Rarity, Fluttershy & Applejack in his "Friendship Circle" so, all hope is not lost for him just yet. 

Plus, Princess Luna & Princess Celestia, too.)

Edited March 23, 2018 by Sparklefan1234

[Loyal Defender 4,111]

I then sent a letter to Twilight only, since she’d understand, asking her to meet me in my room, but tell no one.

(You'll have to get all nice and sweet about this, since Loy REALLY REALLY needs comfort right about now.)

 

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[Sparklefan1234 170,667]

(*Sigh* Ok... )

 

*Knock, knock*

 

Loyal, may I come in? 

Edited March 23, 2018 by Sparklefan1234

[Loyal Defender 4,111]

“*Sniff* Come in...well...teleport in, I’m too afraid to unlock the door.”

 

 

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[Sparklefan1234 170,667]

*Twilight teleports into Loyal's room*

 

Hello, Loyal,

 

Spike told me you destroyed my Scream Room.

 

Wanna talk about that? 

Edited March 23, 2018 by Sparklefan1234

[Loyal Defender 4,111]

“Only if you promise not to lie or decieve me...*sniff*..but what do I know, everypony’s been doing it to me...”

 

 

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[Sparklefan1234 170,667]

You can trust me, Loyal. 

 

Cross my heart & hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my eye! *Performs gesture*

Edited March 23, 2018 by Sparklefan1234

[Loyal Defender 4,111]

I told Twilight what happened to me before, everything to Trixie decieving me. And in good detail.

 

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[Sparklefan1234 170,667]

That's what happens when you try to make friends with ponies who were once enemies of the Princess of Friendship. 

Edited March 23, 2018 by Sparklefan1234

[Loyal Defender 4,111]

“Not to mention Starlight and her PLANNED it all..”

 

 

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[Sparklefan1234 170,667]

That's not really all that surprising considering my histories with both Trixie & Starlight Glimmer. 

Edited March 23, 2018 by Sparklefan1234

[Loyal Defender 4,111]

“I ought to hide in here for the rest of my life and just...speak to no one but you, Fluttershy, Spike, AJ...Rarity...and just not talk to Starlight again.”

 

 

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[Sparklefan1234 170,667]

*Meanwhile, somewhere deep in the Everfree Forest*

 

Is it done? 

 

Yes, My Queen.

 

*"Starlight Glimmer" transforms to reveal she is in fact a Changeling, one of the few who still remain from Queen Chrysalis's old regime* 

 

Good. 

 

We have broken Loyal Defender to the point where soon his true-self shall roam free from his weak pony vessle.

 

Soon, My Changelings, Equestria will be ours! 

 

*Evil laughter*

Edited March 23, 2018 by Sparklefan1234

[Loyal Defender 4,111]

(OH MY GOD! I remembered how everyone was acting, and I randomly guessed that they were Changelings as a joke, but HOLY SHIT

HOW WAS i RIGHT?!)

“I just don’t get it….if it’s a test, they’d have at least considered how angry I’d get. It’s like they don’t even care anymore.’

 

 

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