offering critique Silky's Beauty Spa (OC creation and re-designing)

[ThePinkestofPones 6,048]

"Why thank you Shiny! Been really ingrained in the doodle world recently" says Saturn, with a smile 

[Shiny Silvermoon 4,316]

11 minutes ago, ThatPinkPone said:

"Why thank you Shiny! Been really ingrained in the doodle world recently" says Saturn, with a smile 

"That's awesome! No matter what it means!" 

[ThePinkestofPones 6,048]

"Glad you like them!" Saturn says, giggling 

[Iridescent Edge 457]

*I peak my head through the door.* “Um, hi. Is anyone going to notice me here?”

[Ice Princess Silky <3 17,940]

( Hi there! I do not get notifications since my notifications BLOW up, already and I do apologize for that. )

Silky seems absent from the store despite the fact that the door was open for him to peek his head through. Despite that, there was a chair in front of a mirror that looked rather inviting to sit on.

[Saturn Ring (Remake)]

"HELLO!" shouted a voice, if Iridescent should look to his left he should see a bright pink unicorn, with a magenta, cyan and white mane and tail, she wore a light blue hoodie and a pair of headphones, she also had white markings on her legs, her cutie mark was the planet saturn colored blue with 3 stars under it.

[Iridescent Edge 457]

*I look to my left at the cyan, white, and magenta mare.* “Hi. Who’re you?” *I take a few steps into the building.*

[ThePinkestofPones 6,048]

1 minute ago, IridescentEdge said:

*I look to my left at the cyan, white, and magenta mare.* “Hi. Who’re you?” *I take a few steps into the building.*

"I'm one of Silky's friends, I come here sometimes, check on the place, I'm Saturn, and you are?" She said

[Iridescent Edge 457]

“My name’s Iridescent Edge, but my friends just call me Iri.”

[Saturn Ring (Remake)]

1 minute ago, IridescentEdge said:

“My name’s Iridescent Edge, but my friends just call me Iri.”

"Nice to meet you, what brings you here?" She asked. 

[Iridescent Edge 457]

“Uh, curiosity? Boredom? Sometimes I just like to wander aimlessly and explore.”

[ThePinkestofPones 6,048]

12 minutes ago, IridescentEdge said:

“Uh, curiosity? Boredom? Sometimes I just like to wander aimlessly and explore.”

"Ah, a casual adventurer, like myself! What intrigued you about this place particularly if I may ask?"

[Iridescent Edge 457]

"I don't know, I just saw it and thought, 'why not?'"

[Ice Princess Silky <3 17,940]

3 hours ago, IridescentEdge said:

"I don't know, I just saw it and thought, 'why not?'"

Suddenly, a pony would appear out of nowhere and smile "Ah! Velcom, Velcom!" it looked like a pony with blond hair from GerMANEy. 

"Have a seat my good gentlecolt! How may I help you?!"

There were so many beauty potions and magazines laying around. It was pretty clear the pony was suggesting some kind of new style for @IridescentEdge 
"Tell me! What is your name? What style would you like for your hair?"

(Please add some images or references if you would like a quick sketch of your character in some new design)

[Saturn Ring (Remake)]

"Ay, Silk, I got a friend who needs your help too," Saturn smiled, leading a clearly robotic pony into the room, "this is Violette Storm, anything you could do for her?"

[Iridescent Edge 457]

19 minutes ago, Ice Princess Silky <3 said:

Suddenly, a pony would appear out of nowhere and smile "Ah! Velcom, Velcom!" it looked like a pony with blond hair from GerMANEy. 

"Have a seat my good gentlecolt! How may I help you?!"

There were so many beauty potions and magazines laying around. It was pretty clear the pony was suggesting some kind of new style for @IridescentEdge 
"Tell me! What is your name? What style would you like for your hair?"

(Please add some images or references if you would like a quick sketch of your character in some new design)

*I lie down on the seat.* "Uh, I like my mane the way it is. What do you think? Is it too flashy? Too 'Mary Sue?'"

Iridescent_Edge.update.psd

Edited June 6 by IridescentEdge
Adding image because I was requested to.

[Ice Princess Silky <3 17,940]

Moments ago, IridescentEdge said:

*I lie down on the seat.* "Uh, I like my mane the way it is. What do you think? Is it too flashy? Too 'Mary Sue?'"

The blond pony, who was just called Silky by @ThePinkestofPones for some reason, simply smiled as she checked the pony's hair* Not at all! It looks fabulous. But if you would like we can give it a nice spa wash and add some shine.

12 minutes ago, Saturn Ring (Remake) said:

"Ay, Silk, I got a friend who needs your help too," Saturn smiled, leading a clearly robotic pony into the room, "this is Violette Storm, anything you could do for her?"

*she smiles* Thank you for calling me Silky. You must be talking about my hair. But my name is Marta c:

How may I help your friend?

 

[Saturn Ring (Remake)]

15 hours ago, Ice Princess Silky &lt;3 said:

The blond pony, who was just called Silky by @ThePinkestofPones for some reason, simply smiled as she checked the pony's hair* Not at all! It looks fabulous. But if you would like we can give it a nice spa wash and add some shine.

*she smiles* Thank you for calling me Silky. You must be talking about my hair. But my name is Marta c:

How may I help your friend?

 

She said "OOP, must be a new employee then," and then looked to Violette, "she just needs a model update, I think she looks too much like me," 

[Shiny Silvermoon 4,316]

*Suddenly wakes up on a nearby chair at the beauty spa.* "Wha- What's going on? Where am I? Does anypony needs a name for their OC? That's one of my special talents! That and being able to throw croissants and they come back to me like boomerangs!"

[Ice Princess Silky <3 17,940]

8 hours ago, Saturn Ring (Remake) said:

She said "OOP, must be a new employee then," and then looked to Violette, "she just needs a model update, I think she looks too much like me," 

A new hairstyle you say? What about a cute little pony tail? 

[Snoopy Fan 7,814]

6 minutes ago, Ice Princess Silky &lt;3 said:

A new hairstyle you say? What about a cute little pony tail? 

Aww, cute. I like it.

[ThePinkestofPones 6,048]

20 minutes ago, Ice Princess Silky &lt;3 said:

A new hairstyle you say? What about a cute little pony tail? 

Something more long