writing The Beast of Krowlihood (horror poem)

[MelancholicMemory 2,025]

Data Void requested a darker poem, so I wrote this scary little poem.  Hope you enjoy it! Comments, requests, and suggestions are greatly appreciated.

 

Here’s the scenario: It is midnight. You are being guided through a dark, dead forest by a hooded man, holding a lantern, whose dim light barely illuminates the trail before you. All is silent, except the crunching of the leaves below your feet and the chirping of cicadas, interrupted occasionally by the screeches of some creature off in the distance. Your heart pounds in your chest as you shake and tremor. You look about in fear, seeing nothing but shadows, and crooked trees. You softly ask your guide in a shaking voice if there is anything to be afraid of in the woods. He responds with this.

 

 

“The Beast of Krowlihood”

 

Out there in this forest,

Where the crooked boughs do bend,

You just might lose your life,

So listen close here, my dear friend.

 

Deep within the shadows

Of the corners of these woods,

Lives a beast

You can’t defeat,

The beast of Krowlihood.

 

Some say he’s a dragon

Whose flames toast passers-by.

He’ll bite and stab and burn you

‘Til you slowly, slowly die.

 

Some claim that he’s a monster,

Who lives to watch you cry.

He’ll tear you into pieces

Just to watch you scream and writhe

 

Some say that they ‘re werewolves,

Who bite and fight for flesh.

They smell the blood of cowards,

So you just might be next!

 

Some say that he’s a creature

Of shadows, dark and cruel,

Who consumes you from the darkness

For wanderin’ like a fool.

 

Some argue he’s a killer

Who giggles with a smile;

Stalking through the forest,

As you rot here for a while.

 

Some people don’t believe it,

But I, I know it’s there

‘Cause travelers don’t return from here,

So, fellow, do beware!

 

Now lean in here and listen,

For now you’ll know the truth.

 I know this lonesome creature;

I’ve known him since my youth.

 

Deep within the shadows

Of the corners of these woods,

Lives a beast;

That beast is me!

The beast of Krowlihood!

 

RAWR!

 

[The Stranger 812]

I LOVED this poem! It was so creative to make it from the hooded man's point of view. I felt like he was talking to me and I was the fellow in the woods he was guiding. The end was such a big twist. What I thought of the hooded man was turned upside-down when he revealed he was the creature. 

 

 

Now I'm left with questions like:

 

What hapened to the traveler the man was guiding. 

 

Why was the traveler in the woods to begin with?

 

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This has to definitely be one of my favorites. 

 

This poem would make an interesting story. 

Edited January 5, 2013 by Data Void

[MelancholicMemory 2,025]

I LOVED this poem! It was so creative to make it from the hooded man's point of view. I felt like he was talking to me and I was the fellow in the woods he was guiding. The end was such a big twist. What I thought of the hooded man was turned upside-down when he revealed he was the creature. 

 

 

Now I'm left with questions like:

 

What hapened to the traveler the man was guiding. 

 

Why was the traveler in the woods to begin with?

 

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This has to definitely be one of my favorites. 

 

This poem would make an interesting story. 

Thank you so much! I may continue the story at some point, either in poetry or prose, though I left some things, like the true nature of the monster purposefully vague.

[truemlp_fan98 20]

O_O!!! WOW!! Scary stuff dude! You're a really good writer and I'm very impressed. One tip is to rhyme things more, you can buy a rhyming dictionary.

[MelancholicMemory 2,025]

O_O!!! WOW!! Scary stuff dude! You're a really good writer and I'm very impressed. One tip is to rhyme things more, you can buy a rhyming dictionary.

Thanks! I have a rhyming dictionary, and I'm kind of confused by how you say I should rhyme more because the whole poem rhymes. Were you being sarcastic?

[truemlp_fan98 20]

Thanks! I have a rhyming dictionary, and I'm kind of confused by how you say I should rhyme more because the whole poem rhymes. Were you being sarcastic?

Im just talking in general, for any aspiring poets who might be reading this topic, if you get what im saying your poetry is very good

[MelancholicMemory 2,025]

Im just talking in general, for any aspiring poets who might be reading this topic, if you get what im saying your poetry is very good

Oh, okay, now I understand. I agree, a rhyming dictionary is very helpful, although poetry doesn't  necessarily have to rhyme, although mine usually does.

[truemlp_fan98 20]

Oh, okay, now I understand. I agree, a rhyming dictionary is very helpful, although poetry doesn't  necessarily have to rhyme, although mine usually does.

I think good poetry should always rhyme because if it doesn't rhyme it's just a story and that's no good :/

I guess poetry doesnt have to rhyme but if it doesnt we call it Bad Poetry!!!

[MelancholicMemory 2,025]

I think good poetry should always rhyme because if it doesn't rhyme it's just a story and that's no good :/

I guess poetry doesnt have to rhyme but if it doesnt we call it Bad Poetry!!!

Some of the best poetry ever written doesn't rhyme. Poe, Dickinson,  Thoreau, Frost, Whitman, the list goes on and on of great poets who largely didn't rhyme. TheBronyHeart, perhaps the most notable poet here on the forums, seldom utilizes rhyme in his work. The line between poetry and prose is not defined by rhyme at all. I prefer to rhyme, but those who don't aren't any worse than I am.