writing The Purge

[BlackShardNixium 277]

This is a little mini-snippet from a story I'm writing myself. All characters and concepts belong to me, enjoy!! Familiers (elemental aides) speak in these types of brakets {{ }}

Paraguard(all powerful people with elemental power) appearances:

Bindistiva (Bindi)- Earth

Tessarla (Tess)- Water

Johnathen- Air

Lani- Fire (and later, Darkness)

 

There had been pain. Excruciating, indomitable pain. It radiated everywhere, rippling upwards from the base of her spine and slamming into her heart like the force of an almighty tidal wave. The cruel feeling of sheer power, gripping her and tearing through with its jagged, devistaring claws.

Laughing at her.

Killing her.

There were screams. The trumpeting of indescribable agony and grief. A piece of one's soul being violently wrenched away in a single terrible moment. Bindistiva could hear her beloved comrades dying. She hung lucidly in that place just before death, her prone body slumped in a terribly beautiful, once sacred meadow.

The meadow now defiled with the thick, scarlet blood of the betrayed.

Tygis fell. The majestic russet pheonix perishing in a horrific flash of dark energy. The smell of ozone and charred meat assaulted her fading senses. Johnathen froze, staring at his Familier. Of what remained of him. He howled and roared in his grief and rage and vengeance, the force of the breeze around them changing completely. The sky was impaled with lightning, the wind positively screaming, bending to Johnathen's will. He drew the air around him, preparing his attack.....

Before he was promptly stabbed through his heart.

Bindistiva could not even cry out as her comrade, the man that had been like a brother, fell as his pheonix did.

Departing this life.

The betrayer. The murderer. The achingly beautiful dark empress, with dark skin and thick curls, turned to stare at the last standing Paraguard, a young pale women with a cascade of chestnut brown locks. Her blue eyes shimmered with wretched tears, blinking as one slid languidly down her cheek.

"Lani," she whispered, rich voice choked with unspeakable grief, "What have you done?"

"Only what should have been done a long time ago, dear Tessarla!" the Betrayer's voice was a serpent, coiling restrictingly around its cornered prey.

The young Water Paraguard, who was known as Tessarla, knelt beside her own Familier, slain in the same manner as Tygis, before turning to her ex-comrade.

"You may strike me down without any fight, but mark my words Lani, you will come to regret your decision..." She spoke cryptically, her tears ceasing, "You have betrayed you fellow Paraguards. Your family. Your Familier, and your home. You have betrayed Fyrada, and it will not go unpunished."

Without a word, or a single bat of an eyelash, Lani waved her hand imperiously, the darkness bending to her every wim.

Tessarla was dispatched without a second thought...

Bindistiva sighed as she felt anything the remotely resembled hope leave her body. She was content to die. Her friends were dead. Her world was all but done for. The battle ended, the Paraguards fell, the Betrayer departed. She could almost feel herself beginning to fade away when she heard a voice. A small, achingly comforting voice.

{{Bindi get up! Get up please!! Bindi, stop dying, wake up! Please get up!!!}}

Avvy. Dear, sweet, wonderful Avvy. Bindistiva's Famlier. She opened her eyes, teal orbs beginning to dull as crimson spilled from the jagged tear in her lower back. Her Familier, a small iridescent azure kitten, with fitting gossamer white wings, fluttered just before her eyes, the picture of distress.

With the knowledge that her precious Familier had indeed survived Lani's terrible onslaught, she let the world, finally, fade to black...

 

This is not the end of the story. Oh no, far from it! There is a lot more to Bindi's tale, and its amazing! I really really would enjoy some critiquing on this, for I'm afraid I'm only a beginner with some rather big plans for the future.

If you have any questions about how the story goes, and the actual plotline at this point, feel free to ask away! Also, do try checking out the RP based on this story ((Dark Days: The Purge))

Edited January 23, 2013 by BlackShardNixium