Imposter

[My_Little_Dashie20 14]

(This is a remake of a story that I wrote a long time ago and its short. This was my first story, so let me know what you think and try not to be rude about it please)

 

One bright and sunny day in Ponyville, Rainbow Dash was sleeping in her cloud mansion that was floating   in the sky. She yawned and stretched her hooves, "Another day to be awesome!" she said. Rainbow Dash got out of her fluffy cloud bed and flew out the window. She stopped when she saw a pony with a black robe, covering her entire face and body. Rainbow thought that this pony looked suspicious, like a killer. She flew up to the strange pony and confronted her,

 

"If you think that your going to kill anybody, your sadly too late!" Rainbow shouted.

 

The pony looked around, confused.

 

"What are you talking about?" she said.

 

"That robe. It makes you look awesome but at the same time suspicious." Rainbow said.

 

The pony shook her head, "I'm not going to kill anybody." she said, "I'm just new here."

 

"Well, why didn't you say so?" Rainbow asked. "I'm sorry I thought you were a killer."

 

The pony smiled even though you cant see her smile, "It's fine. I'm Kiara, whats your name?" she asked.

 

Rainbow Dash flipped her mane like a showoff, "I'm Rainbow Dash!" she replied. 

 

Kiara and Rainbow Dash shook hooves with each other, "Now lets remove that robe. It's freaking everypony out." Rainbow Dash suggested. Kiara was scared,

 

"No, Rainbow Dash! Dont-"

 

She was interrupted when Rainbow Dash pulled off the robe, Kiara looked EXACTLY like Rainbow Dash, only her mane and tail were blue and her color was grey.

 

"Hey!" Rainbow shouted. "It's not cool to steal other ponies looks! Whats the big idea?!"

 

Kiara backed away, "I...um...I just..." she stuttered.

 

"Come on, say it already!" Rainbow demanded.

 

"I just wanted to be like you!" Kiara answered. "Your so cool! When I first saw you, I thought you were Super awesome and totally amazing! So I decided to try to be like you and have the same moves but everypony in Cloudsdale got mad and threw me out so I came here to get a new start!"

 

Rainbow Dash stopped being angry, "Listen, Kiara. You can't copy me and be exactly like me." she said. "How about I teach you some of my moves?" 

 

Kiara looked thrilled, "Awesome! I'm ready to learn!"

 

They both flew away and everything was okay. They both were happy and friendly to each other

 

THE END 

Edited January 23, 2013 by My_Little_Dashie20

[SkyGust 71]

I like it, nice first story, and it had a good ending. 

 

Ah, just a suggestion though. Change anybody to anypony for a more realistic fic.

[My_Little_Dashie20 14]

I like it, nice first story, and it had a good ending. 

 

Ah, just a suggestion though. Change anybody to anypony for a more realistic fic.

Thanks for the suggestion. When I uploaded this on Fimficiton.net, I got so many insults about this story. But your the first person to ever complement it. Thanks.