adventure The Edge of Time

[CornBreadGang 514]

Here's something that I know a lot of ponies were waiting for! And it got done before the scheduled release date!

Comments are appreciated, and, without further ado, I present The Edge of Time!

 

The Edge of Time: Full Story

 

In the middle of a forest came a gasp. A gasp, not one of breath, but of an awakening. The gasp came from none other than Light Streak, a pegasus that had gone one step too far. He thought he could stop a dark overlord single- hooved, but he was ever so wrong. Not only had he put his life in jeopardy, he put time in danger, as well. "Wh-Where am I?" Asked a confused Light Streak, looking around. Around him lay 5 other ponies, 2 pegasi, 2 unicorns, and an earth pony. Light was confused. 'I wonder why there are so many others, what do we have in common?' Thought Light, seeing the scars. On his arm lay cuts that read "hero" and "time". These marks were on the arms of two of the other ponies laying down, sleeping. The other three had the cuts "ruler" and "darkness" engraved in their arms. 'Something tells me I have enemies as well as allies in this forest. Anything that is dark will be destroyed!' Thought Light, hearing a gasp. The earth pony had risen, and he had the latter cuts in his arm. When the pony came to, he immediately jumped and pinned Light down. "Who are you?!" She demanded, slamming Light's face with punch after agonizing punch. "Stop!" Shouted Light, slamming the earth pony with the force of a MAC truck. "Give me a minute, and I'll tell you who I am." Said Light, gasping for air. " I am Light Streak, protector of good. And who might you be?" Inquired Light. "I am Cleo, and you can't trick me." Said Cleo. "Why would I even consider-" Light was cut off as Cleo ran him over and sprinted away. "You won't stop my destiny!" The earth pony shouted, speeding away. "Something tells me that she isn't the only one who will try and stop me..." Said Light, seeing two other ponies arise: a unicorn and a pegasus. They both had the evil cuts. "Great, more that I have to deal with." Groaned Light. "Before you go ape on me, I'm Light Streak. And you are?" Asked Light. "I am Jack Spades." The pegasus said. "And I am Todd Stocks." Said the unicorn. "And we're both as confused as anything. But we feel compelled to leave here, almost as if someone or something is calling us..." Said Jack in a trance-like voice. The two began to walk away mindlessly. "Mind control, how could they have possibly screwed up that bad?" Asked Light. That's when he saw it. The cuts were radiating with red. "The cuts control them..." Observed Light, looking at his own, non-glowing cuts. They were selected, but for what?" Said. Light, as the other two ponies rose behind him and tapped Light on the shoulder. "Hey, do you know where we are?" Asked one of them, a unicorn. A pegasus stood beside the unicorn. "I'm guessing the Everfree, seeing as this is a very frightening forest." Answered Light. "But I think you and I will get along fine. Look at your arms, your cuts match mine." Said Light to the unicorn. The two ponies did not take the cuts lightly. "Why would somepony do this?!" Asked the pegasus, concerned for everypony's health and well-being. "Is everypony alright?" The unicorn asked. "Three are gone, brainwashed by some sort of signal, maybe from him..." Said Light. "And who is 'he'?" Asked the pegasus. "An old enemy of mine who vowed to control time and space. And it seems that he finally won..." Lamented Light. "I failed... I tried so hard to stop him on my own, but my attempts were futile. I'm too weak, I can't stop him, I can't-" light was cut off by the pegasus tapping him on the shoulder. "You won't fight alone. We will fight for what's right. We'll survive. We will save time." Said the pegasus. "I guess we should introduce ourselves. I'm Code Junkie." Said the pegasus. "And I'm Blue Moon." Said the unicorn. "And we're willing to help you." Said Blue Moon. "I guess with an offer like that, I simply can't refuse." Said Light with a grin. "Oh yeah, I'm Light Streak." Said Light. "Great to meet you, Light, now let's get out of here." Said Code Junkie, grabbing the hooves of Light and Blue, and starting to run toward the edge of the forest. What they saw at the edge shocked and traumatized them. There was fire. And a lot of it. Trees and cities were burning. Canterlot was in ruins, and in its place stood a black tower, where the three ponies from earlier now stood, each with a smug grin. Behind them stood an alicorn. "So I was right..." Moaned Light, "This won't be easy." Light added. "It doesn't need to be, you have us." Said Blue with a smile. "Plus, who is that alicorn?" Asked Code with a blank expression. Light sighed. "That is Shadex, ruler of all things evil, and now, ruler of time... And I let it happen." Said Light. Code smacked Light upside the head. "Stop blaming yourself!" Code cried. "Blaming yourself makes things worse. The blame is no pony's" said Code. "I agree with you, Code." Said Light, readying himself. "It's time for a trek to the former Canterlot, all we have to do is go through Ponyville- or at least what's left of it, and we should be able to hoof it. Shouldn't take more than a day." Proclaimed Light. "Are we ready for the journey?" Asked Light. "Ready." Responded Blue and Code. As the group trekked, they came upon the ruins of Ponyville, where the trio finds four ponies crying. "This could have been stopped..." One mumbled. Light was almost scared to communicate to the ponies, but he spoke, at last. "Hello? You four?" Asked Light. All four ponies turned to Light, tears coming down their faces. "What is the matter?" Asked Light. "They- they took him..." Responded an earth pony. "Who took who?" Asked Blue. "The dark ones... They took Moonlight..." Said a pegasus in the group. "And I wish to stop the dark ones, but their power is incredible..." Said the same pegasus. "It would be useful..." Added the pegasus. "Don't you even think about going with them!" Shouted Code to the group of four. "Please, introduce yourselves." Said Light politely. The group was silent, until one stood. It was the pegasus. "I am Jalokim." Said the pegasus. "And I am the one with the most sorrow. The dark lord was my friend..." Said Jalokim. "I-I'm sorry, that he took such a path..." Said Light, patting the pegasus' shoulder. Next to speak was a unicorn. "I am Blazing." Said the unicorn. Next to stand was an earth pony. "I am Daisy." She said. Finally came a unicorn. "And I am Pixel Sizzler." Said the unicorn. "It is an honor to meet all of you pony's company." Said Light. "And I am sincerely sorry to hear of the news of Moonlight. But, we can still save him. Would any of you be willing to fight for justice?" Asked Light. All of them but Jalokim replied with "yes". Jalokim had other ideas. "Now, for weapons... Where were the Ponyville barracks?" Asked Light. "Ponyville barracks?" Inquired Blazing. "There were barracks?" Added Daisy. "Yes, hidden ones." Said Light. "Celestia had weapons stored. Ah ha!" Shouted Light, finding the barracks amidst the rubble. There were only four bows left, with a couple hundred arrows. There were also two swords. Light handed Blazing, Daisy, Pixel, and Jalokim bows and arrows. To blue and Code he gave the blades. "Use your arrows wisely." Said Light. He then turned to Blue and Code. "Wield your blades with pride, for you will win this day." Said Light. "Everypony, charge to the castle!" Shouted Code. All of them did so. A couple of hours passed before they arrived at the citadel of Shadex. Unbeknownst to any of the ponies, Jalokim passed behind the group of heroes, and behind Pixel. "This is for Moonlight." He whispered, as he shot Pixel in the back. Pixel fell in agony. "No, no, no..." Moaned Pixel. Light went over to attend to the pony, when a booming voice came over the land. "Well done, Jalokim." Said the voice. "Moonlight? Is that you?" Asked Jalokim. "Yes, Jalokim. It is I, Moonlight Aura. Don't you see how fun it is to kill and slaughter?" Asked Moonlight. "Join us, and be with you friend." Said Moonlight, motioning to Shadex. "Yes, Moonlight, I can't betray you or Shadex..." Boomed Jalokim, flying to the top of the citadel, and standing with Todd, Cleo, Jack, Moonlight, and Shadex. Light stayed beside Pixel as the pony passed away. The first casualty of war. Through all this, Todd watched. And what he saw was wrong. War was starting, and Code gave the order to fire arrows. The ponies in the citadel had much better weaponry, having better bows, which should have killed easily, but the heroes were quick to avoid. Todd didn't make a noise as he made a choice. He had to stop the evil. Todd turned and gouged the eyes of Shadex. "You FOOL!" Cried Shadex. "Kill him!" Shouted Shadex. All bows were turned on Todd, giving the heroes enough time to make a plan. The wielders of the bows continued to fire, and Blue with Code stayed with them. Light, however, flew to the top of the citadel, ever so silently. 'Thank you, Todd. You have redeemed yourself...' Thought Light as he saw the arrows penetrate the skin of the fallen warrior Todd. "They turned on their own comrades..." Said Jalokim as Shadex regained his sight. "I have to help the ponies below, they fight united. Shadex and Moonlight are corrupt... I'll just have to stop that..." Said Jalokim, scooting behind Moonlight. The kill attempt failed. "Treachery!" Cried Shadex. "No, it's called heroism." Said Jalokim with a smirk, going to the heroes. "If you think you can stop us like that, you're wrong." Cried Cleo and Jack. "Cleo, kill the soldiers." Said Jack. "Be ruthless." As Cleo drew the bow, Blue went in front of the three ponies in the front. "You'll have to kill me first." Said Blue. Cleo hesitated, but Jack shouted, "So be it!" Grabbing Cleo's bow and firing it at Blue. It hit its mark dead center. Blue fell, and Code came to Blue's side. "Code..." Moaned Blue. "Yes, Blue?" Asked Code, in tears. "Keep fighting... Don't stop... Don't let them win..." Said Blue as he left the world. "I won't, Blue! For Blue!" Cried Code. "Fire at them!" Cried Code, "But watch out for Light!" At the top of the citadel, Light encountered Cleo and Jack. "So, are we gonna do this the easy or hard way?" Asked Light. "The hard w-" Jack was cut off by Cleo, who pulled Jack out of Light's way. "This is your battle against Shadex, and this is our battle against your militia. I fight with honor." Said Cleo. "I thank you." Said Light, entering Shadex's room. "Shadex, we meet again..." Said Light. "You again." Scowled Shadex. "I only spared you because you were amusing, but this time, there will be no sparing. Only DEATH!" Shouted Shadex, walking to Light. Shadex unsheathed his black blade, and the two were ready for battle. "All good things come to an end, Light Streak. Even you!" Shadex cried, slamming Light into a wall. "Not this time, though." Said Light. "I have a trick." "Oh, what are you gonna do? Card tricks?" Teased Shadex. "No, this." Said Light, flipping in the air, and landing behind Shadex. Light unsheathed his blade and slammed it into Shadex's heart. "Well played, good sir, well played..." Said Shadex, taking his final breath. Light sighed in relief, and looked out to find Cleo stopping Jack from shooting. "I feel more... Free..." Cleo said, as the cuts on everypony's arms disappeared. Everything was returning to normal. Only one thing could not be mended- the dead. Light let out tears as the sky began to glow white. There stood a pegasus, beyond words in beauty. "Well done, Light and company. You have saved time from Shadex, and it has been restored to its rightful place with me. I am Lyona, the Watcher. I control time once again, and now, you must all return to the way it once was. Back to your own time." Said Lyona. "Any departing words?" She asked Light. "Yes. Everypony, you will be missed, and I will hold this in heart." Said Light. And with that, everything was normal.

There was a gasp in a house in the middle of a night. Not a gasp for air, but a gasp of awakening. Dawn filled the sky, and Light Streak felt great. He stood up, and walked out his door. And he dwelled on the sky. Because, as it seemed, and as it was, Light had all the time in the world to witness it.

 

THE END

~super2379

 

 

Thanks for reading! Hope you enjoyed! Comments and critique are welcomed!

[The Blades Shadow 444]

Well it's kinda short, but other than that it's pretty good actually. (I really wish it would have been longer, but it's good enough the way is.)

[LittleRawr 679]

Um, this could use some spacing, it's a bit hard to read it...

 

It also felt a bit rushed.

 

You characterized Cleo a little wrong as well, but you mostly got her right. 

[repsol rave 2,963]

overall a pretty good story i would say. at some points it did feel a bit rushed tough.

 

 

Um, this could use some spacing, it's a bit hard to read it...

 

i think there's no spacing and such because he copy/pasted the story to here, making all the alineas disappear.

atleast, that's what i'm guessing :3

Edited October 19, 2013 by repsol rave

[Jalokim VA 31]

Its a bit redundant at some points, but Im sure we can edit it.

 

I loved Jalokim's defection by the way.

 

And like LittleRawr said, it could use some spacing.

[CornBreadGang 514]

overall a pretty good story i would say. at some points it did feel a bit rushed tough.

 

 

 

 

i think there's no spacing and such because he copy/pasted the story to here, making all the alineas disappear.

atleast, that's what i'm guessing :3

You are correct, good sir. And re typing the entire story would take forever.

 

And to everyone, I wrote this on a program with limited spacing, and I wrote many times late at night, so that's why some parts were rushed.

[repsol rave 2,963]

@@super2379,

you think you'll ever do a "part 2" about this story?

it would be pretty cool to read more about this, i think :3 maybe a story where  the keeper of time becomes corrupt with power or something? 

[CornBreadGang 514]

@@super2379,

you think you'll ever do a "part 2" about this story?

it would be pretty cool to read more about this, i think :3 maybe a story where  the keeper of time becomes corrupt with power or something?

 

Yes, I will. However,that one is gonna be LONG and take about two years to write, reason being because I want to add more development, and improve the story as a whole.

[Pinkamena Dianne Pie 465]

I thoroughly enjoyed this. It dd seem a little rushed and could use a little spacing, but that doesn't matter too much as long as it's a good read. And one note: you rule 63'd Moonlight. Other than that, it was fun to read and I can't wait for part II. I give this a 7.5/10.

[CornBreadGang 514]

I thoroughly enjoyed this. It dd seem a little rushed and could use a little spacing, but that doesn't matter too much as long as it's a good read. And one note: you rule 63'd Moonlight. Other than that, it was fun to read and I can't wait for part II. I give this a 7.5/10.

Oops, sorry about that. It was late at night, and my he's and she's were getting mixed. I apologize. Again, the sequel should be better, but it'll take longer.

[Jalokim VA 31]

I can't wait for the sequel!

 

Quick question about it however, will all the characters who survived in this be in the sequel?

 

It would be cool to get some of the background characters become main characters.

[CornBreadGang 514]

I can't wait for the sequel!

 

Quick question about it however, will all the characters who survived in this be in the sequel?

 

It would be cool to get some of the background characters become main characters.

My thoughts exactly. I was having some background characters have more backstory, and have them become main characters.

All the survivors will be in the sequel.

Either that, or it could be separate characters.

[Jack Spades 162]

I had a good time reading it. At times it felt rushed. You kept saying "said" over and over instead of putting emotional adjectives after it to add more depth and emotion. I saw some typos, but that's the annoying little grammar nazi inside of me. I had a few good laughs (read Shadex's lines in a high pitched squeaky voice).

 

Overall: 7 out if 10 (I'm feeling generous today)

 

Note: I'm a real cold-hearted moe foe in this thing.

And I love Shadex's last words.

[CornBreadGang 514]

I had a good time reading it. At times it felt rushed. You kept saying "said" over and over instead of putting emotional adjectives after it to add more depth and emotion. I saw some typos, but that's the annoying little grammar nazi inside of me. I had a few good laughs (read Shadex's lines in a high pitched squeaky voice).

 

Overall: 7 out if 10 (I'm feeling generous today)

 

Note: I'm a real cold-hearted moe foe in this thing.

And I love Shadex's last words.

Yeah, I made those his last words for some LOL's.

And someone has to be a ruthless villain, right?

Right?

Right?

I tried not to use "said" I use things like shout, holler, lament, and such. But most of the time, I worked on this at 2:00 AM every night, so that explains the spelling errors.

[Jack Spades 162]

Yeah, I made those his last words for some LOL's.

And someone has to be a ruthless villain, right?

Right?

Right?

I tried not to use "said" I use things like shout, holler, lament, and such. But most of the time, I worked on this at 2:00 AM every night, so that explains the spelling errors.

Shout doesn't really cut it either. Try: Shouted in rage. Shouted in determination. Things like that can massively improve and add drama to a fanfic. It can really spice things up.

[CornBreadGang 514]

Shout doesn't really cut it either. Try: Shouted in rage. Shouted in determination. Things like that can massively improve and add drama to a fanfic. It can really spice things up.

Thanks for the idea! I'll make sure to include that in the sequel, when I start production of it. But it may be a while before even that gets started. I barely got this done, since I've been so busy.